Because of the OOC part, it renders the story unbelievable. Grissom and Sara are two main characters prominently featured in a well-known series. We, the readers, do have own fixed idea what they could be expected to do. I know you tried to write a story, but it didn't work for me. It's sad that you had to distort a character to tell a story.

wow, talk about depressing! but don't take that as a flame, this was a unbelievably good story. i am not one for grissom stories, but this made my favs list. but, like i said, this was so sad! i hope sara gets put away for what she did. she gave him back the murder weapon? OMG!
you wrote the story so well, i cannot even tell you one specific thing. i think the story line was very original and awesome. but as i wrote this review, i figured out my favorite part of the story...grissom's little one liner thoughts at the end. you had the greatest ending line too. i am serious, i don't even know what else to say but GREAT JOB!

Nice. I like it, well told.
The only thing is that I think you should let the voice of the story tell the tone it's told in, saying what it is in the summary is a bit unnessassary.
I like it, though... especaially that last line. I love the last line. Keep writing, please. _