I see you went with the "boarded up" theory, a brave theory. Looks good keep it up. I'll be righting mine soon.

Yes, more CoCa fans. Haha. I'm actually writing a final fantasy VII fan fiction where the inspiration was taken from most Coheed songs. But anyways, this is pretty good interpretation, except now with the GA novel out and what is known you might have to go back and change some things. But yeah.

hmm very interesting write more. I write most of my fanfics listening to coheed and cambria or SOAD.

wow...this is much better than what I thought it would be. the story is a little bit short to such a long song but you did get most of the stuff. I wish more people listen to CC but non the less they rock. Warning if you fuck up the Crowing I will have to kill you. lol

Wow. I am stunned. I haven't been able to get ahold of the comic yet, so I was relying on my own simple mind and the internet to at least get an idea of what was going on in the story.. I really hope you continue, and SOON! Pretty Please..? I am anxious to read Three Evils (embodied in love and shadow). I'll probably cry. But please update... and if you could do one for SSTB, that would be majorly cool! But no pressure, you're already a-okay in my book! Thankyou, and sorry for this dreadfully long review. Best fanfic ever.

I love coheed and cambria, great band, I am working on a story on much of the same basis of what you have done, I am writing a story called Project 86, truthless heroes. I f you havnt heard of them then you should deffintly check them out,I might be working on a story called Incubus. check them out, my name is beaglesnot

wow, your story is great, do you have the second stage turbine blade done like this.

I like everything so far, but the death of the children should be more climactic. It's rather hidden in the text, and it should be a bigger deal. Other than that, I like how your interpretation is going. Keep writing and we'll keep reading.

nice

Wow, I'm so glad to finally see something like this. I really enjoyed reading it. I don't necessarily agree with where you've taken the storyline, but until we see the graphic novel, it's anyone's guess, eh?

sorry I haven't done this earlier. the story really is good. i think i like the first two chapters better than i like the third. there is descripitive stuff and the like that i think could be better in that one. keep going. maybe by the end I'll know what you guys are always talking about.

to me it seems you have full grasp to this story. everything is so well detailed and it all seems to fit. except one part in which this is stated by Claudio himself. sorry if this ruins it for you, but remember this is your own interpretation. well claudio said that all but 1 of coheed and cambria's 4 children have died. Claudio (the character) is the only one left standing. Josephine and Maria and Matthew have died...no one knows how but they have.
i also have another question:
in the song "Devil In Jersey City", Coheed is reading a monologue to someone, yet he says something about fucking his daughter, Josephine
"scream loud, scream siyonara,
sweet josephine will you follow me home
scream loud, scream siyonara,
sweet josephine will you fuck me back home"
i swear that's what he says, if you listen to the cd it's not censored, but if you watch the video it is, so i figured it's "fuck me back home"
anyone have any ideas of what this could mean? it could be incest or he could be quoting someone, and is bothered by this or something.
hugs and kisses
-Ely

very nice I think! Keep going man you seem to have a good grasp

The whole story aspect is definitely interesting, but I gave up on trying to make sense of it a long long time ago. I think the best thing to do would be to wait for the band to finally release the comic books and such, so people don't get confused with all these different theories that are around.

man i'm so stoked for this next chapter. i love jesse