This tragically cut short story tears me apart. So much potential, and I'm not just talking about the lemons.

It was still a great read. I like how you didn't play Haruka's attempt at Keitaro as a complete joke without any lasting effect-it would have made them eventually getting together (or eventually ignoring their marital status to reestablish a familial connection) more impactful.

So disappointed. I came into this story thinking it was one of the rare Keitaro/Su matchups...only to find out it's one of the not-so-rare harem variety instead.

cool

Hey forgive my abruptivness but its been six years since u last updated this story have u stopped workin on it i hope not it is a fantastic story and it needs to be finished i hope to c an update done to it soon its been too long

Kitsune is one lucky fox to bed Keitaro first. Of course, she's the most sexually aggressive women in Love Hina.

Suggestions: I hope that if possible, should the story be continued, that in time, that Motoko and Naru's aggression against Keitaro over time can be toned down a little, or it could be possible that one of the other people in the cluster marriage can have them tied up and Keitaro can perform retaliatory sex to get back at the times that they have assaulted him.

I really have to give you credit for having both Haruka and Kitsune take initiative when it came to getting Keitaro into the bed.

Please keep the story going.

Wonderful! Absolutely Wonderful! I'm sure it's been a while since your last update, but please return and update this story. This is how Love Hina should have ended in the first place.

it was great you should make more

I like how you got the story taking its step from one point to another cant wait for more.

This is a pretty decently thoughtout and incredibly well written story. If you ever do consider writing fanfiction again, I do hope you work on this one when you find time. Or, that is, if you still want to write anime based fanfiction, or Love Hina stories again. You are one heck of a writer, I do hope you decide to write again.

Fantastic story i really carnt wait for the next chaptor when will it be comin out plz send a reply on my account to let me know if u are finishin the story or if it has been discontinted thanxs for your time keep up the fantastic work

great story

Dear Mr. Talon,

Is this story up for adoption? I feel that I could add some good content to it if you no longer want to work on it...

Sincerely Your Humble Literary Admirer,

WMWConquerer

lol this is great! too bad its not been updated in a while. well, if you ever have the chance, please update soon! I wonder if age has anything to do with the marriage cos imagine if a woman with a kid had been living in the hotel, would the kid be married to him too?

Please come back to this story soon.

oi! continuation?