This is one of the first fanfics I read
I thought it was so good
But then when they got o the beach, it became confusing
I hate that from what I could even understand, that Shinji cheated on rei
And then you dont finish the story

I will forgive you because ive since read more disappointing fanfica like touch

But my review will be there so im criticizing yo first

Welcome Back, My Friend.

Ripley's Believe It or Not? You cheeky bastard.

Er... did you accidentally skip a chapter? Yeah, they got picked up my NERV, but nothing was mentioned about Shinji getting hospitalized, over the days absence between him and Rei, and about his infidelity. The entire issue just sort of got... glossed over in favor of this.

LAUGHED SO HARD!

ok if you want me to criticize you then i are great no doubt about that but there were plenty of spelling mistakes and some of the words were almost flawless

me!

man your fan fics are amazing! keep going

So is this done now?

Well done, pacing is good, rough around the edges. But what happened to Miyuki?

Updates might be nice if it's not too late to ask...

She packed a brazier. At least she knows to bring something to burn things on.
Is she going to sacrifice something to Armok?

Hilariously, Germany won this last World Cup. You, sir, are a genius.

This version of asuka seems more like akane tendo, since she thinks anything shinji does makes him a pervert, even if he doesn't do anything he is still blamed for it. She basically wants to kill shinji if he so much of thinks about sex, let alone actually does it. hell she would call him a pervert if he asked rei to marry him, in fact judging from the flow so far, if he saw rei and shinji kissing she would probably kill him. suffice to say this version of asuka is never going to get married...or have anything to do with any boy or man. Ah well can't win them all...

Are you trying to get to shinji killed? Seriously? I mean that was seriously cruel, this fic is a shinji and rei story, so you had to go a spoil the relationship between the two...