Very well done! This was a unique and enjoyable story! Thank you!

Good book 6.
Just found it hard to go with all the sudden "Hey look, demons!" And the "Oo-lala he got a shag-friend!" Bits. That was hard to get through. I didn't like the suddenes of it all, it was very jarring.
Good plot though! Tied everything together very well!

No offense, but my experience with grief is nothing like that. Please base your writing on personal experiences or a friend's. If that is what you have done, apologies.

Did you really just make Severus a Gryffindor? I'm going to pretend that didn't happen and it was a slip of the tounge when you said Snape and Remus were in the same house and he roomed with James and Sirius, because I can't accept a gryffindor Snape. Outside of that odd change in Snape's past though I am really enjoying this story. I am looking forward to Moody interrogating Snape and finding out what is up with him. I just hope Moody ends up accepting Snape and gives up his vendetta, but I will wait and see.

Good story with many surprising twists and intriguing cliffhangers. I love how you managed to make things in the books make sense like Neville having Snape as a bogart. Surprise about relations about Snape and Alice left me shocked. Also the powerful twist and back story about his character was unique and refresh. Thanks for sharing.

Busted

Why would Dumbledore give up Snape that easily for all he done for the order. He could protect him and he owes him that much at least. Still some surprises though.

Oh love this so far. Good twist on details from the books. Onwards to the next chapter!

Moody and Snape finally have out their differences. A lot of this story I like better than canon and it ends with a relief for Severus although begins a whole new story for Neville who is Snape's child with Alice Longbottom and who inherited a terrible destiny if Snape can't manage to break the curse tying him to a demon blood sacrifice every seven years to prevent it from devouring the entire world. Yup, it's that bloody intense.

Oh wow! Thank you for such a great story :)

Yes, Moody could be this vicious and callous. He was replaced by a deranged Death Eater for nine months and nobody noticed - not even people who knew him well.

Of course, we now know Sev was a Slytherin, but it's still rather odd. I'd guess the Hat offered him Gryffindor and he turned it down because he didn't want to share a dorm with the nasty boys he'd met on the train, just as Harry turned Slytherin down because he didn't want to share a dorm with Draco. Anbd although he doesn't seem very ambitious I'd say he's very competitive, and the Hat might have interpreted that as ambition.

Blaming Snape is easier than blaming himself, and blaming hismelf is easier than admitting that Dd was right and that Sirius to some extent brought about his own death by being callous to Kreacher.

Yes. If the Dursleys had been really violent Harry would have grown up scared and trying to placate them, or if they had sometimes given him love he would have grown up needy and trying to earn more; but instead they subjected him to a constant low-level unpleasantness which he was able to ignore by becoming immensely self-contained. And because they punished him for accidental magic he couldn't help, but apparently not for cheekiness he could help, he treats punishment as a random annoyance, like rain. He has no desire for adult approval and no feeling that adult disapproval is anything to do with his own behaviour.

Interesting comparison with chatrooms and yes, in astral people will manifest as their self-image, which won't necessarily look much like their physical self. I used to know somebody whose self-image was a small fat dragon.

One potential pitfall is that not everybody's self-image includes clothes...