Aww cute their daughter was born

What the actual fuck. That was absolutely terrible and pathetic

I love the plot, but you should really try fleshing it out a bit. You know, sentence variation? And I think since it's going over a period of 9 whole months, it should really be chaptered.

Oh, and maybe instead of Angel, it could be Angela...

This seems more like a synopsis of a story than actual story itsself. There isn't any discription and it is short and rushed. It needs work, and Hermione would never name her kid Angel. Much too OOC.

Work on it and it'll be ok.

Aw...

That was okay until the corny ending.

That was really cute

Rather rushed, but with some work it'll be OK. And I'm not trying to be insulting, but IMHO, Hermione wouldn't name her daughter that.

Really sweet...

But to short... I want more... ;D *he he*

really good :)

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I loved it! Such a cute ficlet. Keep up the great work! _

oh god, that sucked.

i like fluff as much as the next girl, but you went a little over the top. i mean, seriously, Angel Nicole?

*barf*

Aw, Cute! A lovely Christmas story, perfect to match my mood!

its a good plot, and I Like the whole Angel name thing, but its not written that well. I'm not trying to put you down, its a good start and if you work at it you'll be a great writer!

this is a good story- but that is the corniest name i have ever heard. angel? come on- thats pathetic