A lot of the sentences didn't have proper grammar. You didn't put commas where they were supposed to go, some sentences didn't break off where new dialogue was introduced, and more importantly, there were no question marks whatsoever that I can recall. Poor grammar. That needs a lot of improving.

However.

This has an amazing plot and concept so far. It's probably one of the few Kingdom Hearts fanfics that I like. Keep up the good work, this is really good.

Fai

Wow, this was nice. I really liked it. And cliff hangers are oh-so-delicious, so that's good, too. Good job.

-Fai

THIS IS SUCH A GOOD STORY, PLEASE CONTINUE WITH IT.

CAN YOU PLEASE MAKE THE NEXT CHAPTER! I REALLY WANT TO READ IT! AND I WOUNDER WHO ARE THEY GOING TO MEET IN TRAVERS TOWN?

Wow, that was really good! You actually incorporated some of the things they show in the Deep Dive and KH2 previews, which I think is cool I can't wait 'til you wirte another chapter! Off to read more of your stories (btw, my name is Sabrina, too ; hehe)

WOW, that was really good! need more, *cackles evily*. Hey, thanks for liking my story, that's so sweet. People usually tand to run from my fics, who knows why? *cackls evily again*. I hope you update soon because It's neato. In the meantime I'll just go watch Second Hand Lions, only because I heart Haley Joel Osment so much! *he he he*. Bye for now.
~Loki _~

Hey Black-Rose72! Thanks for reviewing my story! ~ Yours is doing great, you just need to update sooner! What'll happen to Sora? Will he turn into a bad guy too? Can Kairi and Riku find him? And what about that other dude that they captured? Will he return to normal? Gah! So many questions! I can't wait to see what'll happen next! _

i got an idea for the story. i think the blond haired kid should tell them clues about where sora is but hes lying. and they find clues on the way to find the REAL way to sora. keep writing this storys im dying for kingdom hearts 2 and chain of memories to come out!

not bad kairi has a sexy outfit and some g strings

Ahh! It's getting interesting. Wonder what the 'past' is all about? I've started reading this story back in AR and ended it here. Hope Kairi reaches Sora in time.

I love it you should continue!