Hey, contrags on finishing. I just discovered that you had! I must stress that I really enjoyed the story/storyline to this fic. It was new, different, and shows a interesting alternative reality. That said, I think that it could use a bit of work on description. You have introduced a new element to the pretender world, explore it! Draw out the scenes with description. Be more specific, please! It's an interesting idea, but I want to be drawn into the world. The action is there, now show it to the reader. Especially in the psychic fight scene. The set up is there, but I can't picture it. I want more from this awesome fic!

What if instead of leaving the centre they take over the centre? I mean I can't see Miss Parker turning down 50/50 control of the centre. And if they do find Mrs Parker's DSA of her plan. And turn the centre into what it could be a place for good.

Hi there.
I do like the story. At first the thought of Jarod (and the other red files) having supernatural powers was quite strange but now that I got used to the idea,... very well! I really like how you describet the scene in this chapter The mind-fight was really well done. One could follow the moves of the players really good! Keep this going and post a new chapter soon.

hey! i love this story. please update! i check this everyday and if i don't have my pretender adrenaline high going then i'll die! i have a prescription specifically for this too. see! (- your thinking"when will predender fans come to the conclusion that there will be more stories-the threat about the no review thing and that there will be no more stories if you don't give input was just threat-you can consider yourself alive now.) yep, that was me reading your mind reading this in the future. telkenetic and premonitions! i know- i know-a little overboard, but look what you gave Jarod? But we can't help but think he is the hero of all mankind? i thought so. now go update that story-NOW. that was an order. (that was the miss parker ice queen in me-) please,...(that was actually me!)
thanks for the story's - you writers should be awarded frequently.

very interesting.. what do they uncover?

Wow - that was certainly a switch - I would have never thought of Jarod wiping himself from the collective consciense of the Centre! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Hey earthdrago! I'm loving your story! I particularly enjoyed how Jarod ended up at Parker's house. (I think Jarod has some subconscious issues that need to be dealt with.) *grins evilly* Can you imagine if he had accidentally teleported himself into Raines' house! i don't really know what the trio would be working on if they weren't searching for Jarod- I don't really think that they would be working together- after all, they were only brought together to bring Jarod in.

Funny how Jarod landed at Parker's house. :-)
I think the trio would be working through the Centre archives to find some of the hiden secrets. Maybe working some with Angleo. And trying to misdirect Lyle, Raines, and Daddy Dearest. But that is pretty much what they do all of the time. Maybe Broots can find out where Parker and Jarod got their "powers" from.

Sweet! I was kinda confused as to where you were going in the first couple chapters and the speed in which you enveloped the reader. Otherwise, great ffic.

Can't wait to find out what happens next. Please update soon.

I am really enjoying the story. I would love to learn how Jarod does his tricks, please update soon, so I read what Jarod does to the Centre. I would also like to see if Jarod shows anymore tricks to Ms. Parker.

I love your story - still - I can't wait to read what Jarod does to the Centre. I have too many ideas running around my mind of what that actually could be. Thanks for the continuation!

COOL! I really loved the story. I would like to hear more about Jarod's "gifts" and if Miss Parker learns to use them too.