Oh and its Hermione JEAN Granger,you fucktard

This was confusing and ooc, but nice lack of spelling errors.

Um . . . . . . . . . . . . . wow? That was very interesting. I think I liked it. Good job. _

Work on length. The contents of this story can be spread out over many chapters.

Tripping over buckets? Are you *trying* to make Ron look stupid? Oh wait, the bucket is a plot device. It gives reason for needing a mop, bringing him to that paticular closet. Perhaps also a reason for Hermione wanting someone other than him, as you try to make his clumsiness quite clear.

And the plot device strikes again! You would think if Ron was going through so much trouble as getting the mop to clean it up, he would also remove the bucket? But wait, that would take away the plot device before Harry can hit it.

Can we just take a moment to look at how *out* of character Hermione is? If Hermione really were in a relationship with Ron, she would actually care about him. She already does actually, as they are close friends in the books. Hermione wouldn't kiss Draco, it could be believable if you cared to put the effort to make it so. She also wouldn't kiss Draco while in a relationship with Ron. She wouldn't hurt him intentionally.

As you cut to the next scene, Hermione has changed her mind. She's sorry, while during the fight she thought a 'quick snog' didn't matter. Again, no reason to Hermione's actions. No reason for her kissing Draco to begin with and no reason given for her change in emotions.

Again with out of character Hermione in the class. She isn't the type to write 'love notes' in class, she's more there to learn and take notes on the actual class. As if that wasn't enough, she 'leaped' over to Ron's desk and kissed him and walked out of the class. Then enter out of character Snape, who stands by and lets it all happen. If you had ever been in a relationship, you would know that one kiss doesn't solve everything; much less cheating on the other.

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Hey steph! I liked it, for a small easy read. I really like the end. Keep the pen (or whatever you use to write with) moving!

~~TIsH~~

O.O I'm not sure what to say about this fic, except: *Takes a deep breath, readying herself for her speech* draco from the book os a stupid gay moron. Draco from fanfiction is...umm, 'bautiful' guess. Harry's usually cool, and Ron? Well... *Goes over and quickly apologizees to her best friend, Ginny WEasley* He's a stupid git! Good little ficlet, though. *Watches Ginny drag Draco across the screen into another broom closet. *

Always sleepless in my seattle-Jade Summers

*coughs funnily* LMAO Stephy, I love the last part!

I thought it was heaps good! The bit at the end was SO funny!

And you say my fic sucked? Well exuse me for not satisfying you. Speak for yourself. This fic was so STUPID.

I think all 3 are beautiful! But I luv Draco the Best cause hes just so dang sexy! He oozes hottness-I dont get why JKR doesnt bring that more into light!(LOL)

Go Steph! Good job! Funny note at the end there!

No Ron's beautiful and he's mine! Check out my pen name! LOL funny story!

hi i thought your story was cool keep writing it you are a good writer !