| Reviews for Colder Than It Looks Outside |
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   AndurilofTolkien chapter 2 . 2/9/2017 love this |
| asdfjkl chapter 19 . 6/8/2009 well, i've followed the series this far. : brilliant. interesting, angsty, original. yay! : a bit disjointed. you jump from scene to scene and moment to moment without explaining things. you need more description exp: which of estel's arm bones were broken? and you need more info on stuff exp: those throw away lines about estel talking to elrond. you need more. you've got the barebones of a kick ass series-now fill in the structure and make it kick ass! you need more description. and more explanations for things. : same problem as your writing. although your characters are good, they are not fleshed out and filled in. you leave gaping holes in the characters. they are also very inconsistent. you show aragorn acting insanely mature and then doing something insanely immature. don't get me wrong, i know teenagers aren't always very consistent, but still. and you need to explain why people do things the way they do. you give a few great descriptions of stuff, but you don't give the emotional backstory. consistency! finally: you have a tendency to tell things in retrospect. don't tell us what's going on as it happens. keep us in the middle of the plot, in the middle of the action, not outside of it and not after it. so yeah. i really do like this series, i promise! and i hope what i said up there helps xD keep writing! |
| Landorie chapter 19 . 4/16/2004 Sorry I havn't comented a lot since Every Move You Make. I was quite busy in RL. However I do still read your fics and in loving with it. Style and everything. :) I didnt' mean to push you or something but i'm jsut curious. Once again I'm pouring through your "to write" list. What will be your next storie to write? HUES OF INDIGO sounds interesting. ;) (Didn't log in 'cause it said I already signed a review for this chapter and only allows me to have one.) |
| leggylover03 chapter 19 . 4/5/2004 YES I want the Little Estel sories I love those best! Bring them on! |
| A-zla chapter 19 . 4/4/2004 A very good story;I like the way you let Aragorn and Legolas tell the story. I even think that you could write a bit more about the frame. Anyway, really great story! |
| tmelange chapter 19 . 4/3/2004 Great story. Congratulations on finishing it. |
| tmelange chapter 18 . 4/3/2004 Great continuation! |
| French Chipmunk chapter 19 . 4/1/2004 Yay! I loved it! Lots of lovely angst...now off to study for evil engish test... |
| Slivertongue chapter 19 . 3/31/2004 Great story |
| daw the minstrel chapter 19 . 3/31/2004 Lovely ending. These four friends supported one another well. I know this experience was traumatic for Estel, but oddly, it's Elladan I feel most sorry for. |
| Landorie chapter 19 . 3/30/2004 Love the ending. I really do like your style. :) -Tulkas guard you. Este heal you- |
| Lifes a beach chapter 18 . 3/28/2004 So that's how it happened? a very interesting tale to say the least. I am actually interested in being your beta reader. I love your work, and would love to get the first look at the new chapters that you post:) |
| Anthem82 chapter 18 . 3/23/2004 This chapter was really good :) |
| grumpy chapter 18 . 3/22/2004 so that is how Legolas got his scar, Estel bit him, but i am sure he did not mean to. he was in pain. looking forward to more |
| daw the minstrel chapter 18 . 3/22/2004 Oh poor Elladan. How awful that must have been, but now he knows the truth. And I'm so glad that Estel is at last in the hands of those how love him, even if he is still in pain. |
