That is a good story. I've been refusing to read slash lately because so many people are ever so beastly in their writing about. Making it out to be naught but lust. Oh, and half the slash five I've seen are incest which, while homosexuality isn't, is unnatural and perverted. I don't like incest. This, however, is really good. It shows that it's not just lust, but love. I'm not a lesbian myself, but my best friend is, and it's nice to read a story that gives good information and is well written to boot.

-Dyslexic Nerd

AWESOME! Very, very good story!

*is reading it all seriously thinking its so sweet* omg he said the brick thing XD *continues giggling for a while* heh.

Anywho~ Very sweet, very cute X3 I really like how you were able to show both the boys' emotional journeys through the switching of povs. Also, the arm/hand clutching during the fight was just so CUTE X3X3

There should really be more Caspian slash. ;_;

Awesome awesome fic~~ *goes off to read your sequel-thingie* :D!

More Chapters Please

3 That was beautiful and sweet and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I loved your portrayals of Caspian and Edmund, Lucy and Peter. You were true to their characters and the different perspectives in each chapter were wonderful.

Enter the dawn treader.I really think this is quite excellent - you seem to be very good at imitating the lewis style. Normally I can't hack first person but this - I really don't mind. I hope you write more soon

BFF

This is so CUTE! Please continue with this! You've got the characters absolutely spot-on, and your use of the language is great, just like in the books, especially when you write in the third person. I notice you haven't updated in a while... but I really hope you do. It's a really awesome story, and I was to see what happens when they meet again on the Dawn Treader.

oh man I SO wanted them to kiss so badly! X.X Is there gonna be a sequel? (hyper) please? *-* I luvd it, I luvd the emotions! I luv this pairing! (melts happily) I wanna write a fic on them! But I have to have a plot...and I have to be strong against the ANNOYING FLAMERS! (glares at handfulls) I think I WILL write a fic (nods)...now for the research (glances at books)...shouldn't be hard...CONTINUE WRITING! I LUVD IT!

-Wp

I love this!What a great couple!D

"it was Aslan himself that made it so that you would meet Caspian. And he must have known that if you were to meet him, you would fall in love with him; after all, he does know everything. And – and I don’t think he would have let it happen if he hadn’t *meant* for it to happen.

And if Aslan meant for it to happen, then how could it possibly be wrong?"

She's on potentially dodgy ground here, theologically speaking. Gets into all sorts of philosophical stuff with knowledge/what can be known and freedom, and the problem of evil and suffering becomes more acute. It's a fair argument, but not necessarily a compelling one.

"*You* might find yourself acting like a girl if that was the way you were treated all the time" - too true!

Edmund and Lucy are very much in character here, which is great. I think Lucy would be understanding, as you depict her. Irritating as she usually is!

A cracking final line:

"You really are a brick!"

Great, lol!

So sad! I liked all the little details, of comparing Edmund in Narnia to Edmund in his own land, like the earlier comparison of Edmund of legend and Edmund in person. It's like, layers upon layers of getting to know him.

And then God turns up. Gosh. I've looked at your reviews, and -jolly good- you don't appear to have any 'thou shalt go to hell, how dare you profane his almighty cslewis' reviews,there are a couple of 'i don't think you've thought this out, cslewis wouldn't like this' ones. It's quite clear to me that you have thought it out, especially when you get to places like it's clear that Caspian's priorites are straight (no pun intended) - he wants to serve God and be a good king. His love for Edmund...ok words failing now. If only I'd studied English as well as Theology I might be able to give a decent . So, his love for Edmund is important to him, er, obviously, but then, duty, and of course Aslan, is the centre of his life. He watches Edmund go back to his own world, and in doing so, makes a sacrifice I think many Christians would fail to make, if it arose.

And then, and THEN, you get beautiful lines like this that make me cry 'And reflected in them, in many shades of gold, were twin reflections of Edmund, standing forlornly in the Gateway between our worlds, staring directly back at me.'

God is love. And love is love. Earthly love reflects heavenly love. One is reminded (well one is if one has a religion obsession) of all the varying attempts throughout history to compare romantic love to love of God. One wishes one could do express oneself better. One gives up. Well, one tried.

And, well, I don't think CSLewis would approve, but then he was racist as well so just goes to show. He is not to be taken as an idol!

Poor Edmund. I never really liked Peter that much, that's just how he *would* have been. Oh I know, he was *good* but I could never quite get fond of him.

I like the tension in this piece, it's really well written. The POVs are working well, everyone's wonderfully in character (I'm especially noticing it when they speak!) Oh all very dramatic with the fight and the ooh he's gonna be a goner, but very tender as well, both between Edmund/Peter as well as Edmund/Caspian. A good time to bring in physical intimacy - a crisis, when they need support - it makes the progression very natural and realistic.

Hello there. Livejournal's down - what am I to do? Read fanfic, of course :-)

I like this. Caspian's really sweet. I like the way he's having to confront his knowledge of legends with the experience of actually meeting the people from them, e.g. how he views each of them, and how Edmund's description of fighting the white witch is grittier that the romantic legend.

"I find that I do not know how to think about him" - opens up possibilities...

Oh, and the stuff about how special Edmund must have been for Aslan to forgive him, and how much Aslan must have loved him. Yay Christianity.

*Does the 'I like religion' dance*

Slash is perhaps my oldest weakness, so any review I give of well written slash is a bit biased.

Ah well. Im not so hell bent on objectivity that I can't compliment good work.

And this was.

I don't know the canon very well. I don't like the canon very much. But this was interesting. It was enjoyable, it was good to read. So you have made something formerly unknown knowable, and formerly unwanted desireable.

Well done.

As for other takes on this? We all know Christ and Judas had a thing. Bible slash. It's canonical.

*cough*

Ah, sacrilicious..

thanks again