Um, I think the first part is good but I don't really like the second half. I mean, she's dead, and you just switch from her being dead to them being in the rain. You could say something about him wishing for that instead of having such an abrupt change. I still like the second part, but I don't think it really goes with this poem. But you can definitely feel his emotion, at least some of it, from the first half

Hey I like your poems, they have the beginings of something great. the only thing is, it doesnt seem real to me yet, there doesnt seem as much emotion. you might try writing about something in the story you relate to so it will have your own feelings behind it, at least that's what i do. not trying to be critical i really do think they're good, just thought i'd offer some advice, take it or delete it your choice.

WoW! Great job. Later.

My Soul Your Puppet:)

Aw... I actually got teary! This was so sad. I'll admit right here that I'm a Inu/Kag fan, but also got the luv n hotz for Inu/kik! You did a great job! I loved the intense emotions he's feeling over his lost dead luv! Excellent work!O

Awesome! I love your poem, it's very nicely done. I'm more of the Inu/Kag and Kikyo(u)/Suikotsu, but Kik/Inu is wonderful, too!

Kimera Diablos, I didn't understand one word you wrote down, next time, spell it properly.

OMFG! I LOVE THIS! IT'S SO PERFECT!

You are a genius, my friend, a genius!

I am officially your best friend for LIFE!

InuXkikyou 4EVER!

I like it. I like the Kikyo poem too. A few words I don't understand (but thats normal for me) Anyways, it's good...ur stories should be good too.

Nice poem, keep it up! :)

Hey-so what's up? Have you've gone to Go-gaia yet? I hope you have cuz I don't relpy to reviews anymore...sorry. But trust me is soper fun there and you can find my avi! Please use my email for now on, please. or just pm me on go-gaia -okay!

This was nice...I liked it a lot.

It was one of the poems that acually

made sense. Please make more poems.

Ooh, another good one! These poems are beautiful! -sigh- I wish I could write like that... -Aki

Hi its Weird Al62 from like last year sorry for not um updating my story forever but i hae new storys now and i read all your stories and poems

some are good some are not...no offense though no offense

but uh(thinks and taps head)

I FORGOT

well i support your story*Salutes*Next Chappie

Wow. That was good! I like it!

Aw...I just love your poems, Joey! You have a real natural gift...your way with words...5 thumbs up! :D

It's a very well written poem. Very deep for InuYasha to think and say such things, but then it's Kikyou, his first love. Keep writing these lovely poems.