Truly lovely. I'm sad that you are leaving writing. Still, one does get tired. Take care and thank you for sharing your stories.

good story.

I like it. There's not to many stories revolving around the side-cast. Makoto and Maya are one of my favorite couples in the Eva series.

Interesting story.

An unusaul pairing, but with your good characterizations, you made it believable.

I can't say that it seemed rushed, and the story has a good length for a one-shot.

Good work.

See ya when you come back.

Friendly greetings,

STEVE

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My site, my story, my gallery.

Not for kiddies.

You have got to be S*G me!

Retire,...you?

Hell yes the grammer in this one was a bit low ad many things could have been corrected had a decent pre-reader has a go at it before you published but listen here bub, you have done the only Makoto/Maya story that I know of and mainly within canon!

I like te interaction even if the wording was off on some sections. Plus, did they come back have kids or did they simply stay in the LCL fantasy? Your readers want to know so do an epilogue at least! and BTW, Don't stop writing!

Hey Steve talk the the man willya!

dennisud