oooh wow.. did i already told you that i love your dialogues between the two of them? you really get them, that's so awesome. beautiful piece!

Wow this was an amazing yet short story... i loved it i couldn't stop reading it you are good at this type of story, keep on making them and i'll keep on reading them!

Supreme writing, eloquent and brilliantly characterised. I've always loved the 'dance' between Jarod and Miss Parker - nice to see a real pickup on the metaphor.

Very nice. It says alot in very few words.

CrazyA,

Very nice. Good analogy with ‘their dance’ and her to want the music to change. Can stand alone as it is in my opinion, doesn’t need a ‘fix’. But you should continue!

Good work!

Aw! Sweet! I love the way you described her. She wasn't too desperate for him. That was great!

You're such an amazing writer.

You're like Picasso with words.

YES! Finally Miss Parker is being honest with herself AND Jarod. I really liked your story, and I hope you write more - soon!

Thank you.

~clap clap clap~ Great job of expressing a sentiment, a moment, in very few words. Of course, I wouldn't mind seeing more words from you... ;)