Not bad. The present-tense constructions are awkward and ought to be redone in the more common past-tense.

But I'm kind of curious about something I think you're implying, but don't come out and say. Did Shinji rape Misato?

A good story - and a worthy continuance. I like it.

That was actually pretty fucking good. I'm impressed. I was genuinly interested in Midori.
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Wow... very dark and mysterious. I like it!
and Midori... I love that name.

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That's just one mind fsk after another. Will you continue? Will Misato tell Midori about the nature of her conseption? DID Shinji really rape Misato? (I find that kinda hard to grasp)
Wow. that was very well writen. You did an admerable job of portraying some rather disturbing subject matter in a mature fashon.

KoS did write a load of rubbish, I'm not sure what's going on at the back of his head? I read 2 of his stories, I think. I got nothing against him but there's one thing for sure...he lost his mind! I back you up, but I won't blame him entirely. He's just doing it for the entertainment of other sick, twisted fans. It happens all over the world, there's nothing we could do to stop the disturbance. I hope that we all understand that corruption fills the minds of men. I understand how a flame war feels like, and it isn't cool. You earned my respect friend.

Quite disturbing.. yet touching in a certain way..

Keep up with the great work!

I can't help but feel that you've wasted your time writing this. I dig the 'doing something constructive' in response vibe, but sometimes it's just pointless. Aside from that, the mood came across very well,that is, if all that spacing wasn't habitual, but intentional.

Though thinking of what this was an improvement on is always going to tinge this with shadow,I fell the simple style you used was...appropriate.

No exulting praise.

No fanfare.

Appropriate.

That's the right word.

And maybe...

it's way.

How's this, you fucking nerd? I have no problem with posting my email address. I just try to avoid it because e-mail spiders tend to crawl sites like this to gather email addresses and spam them.

Find a new hobby. Once you start whining about the fact that pornography is (and always will be, for your information) a part of the fanfiction subculture, especially in the Evangelion genre, it's a sign that you need to take a break.

Everybody else is over it. Your the first person to truly whine about it to an extent such as this in ages.

First of all haven't you people ever heard of freedom of alows us to write and speck whatever we course his story is sick but he has a right to post one froces you to read a story with a title like date rape .If you read it it's your own fault.I get pissed when I see a sight impose censorship( ).The bottom line is you read it when you knew what it was you felt disgusted it's your own has there own opions thats okay but remember anybody can write what they you thought that was sick watch a few movies based on silience of the guy does the same things but with less sex.

First of all, I am on my soapbox and I'm not ashamed to admit it. Some things are worth getting snotty about. I *did* report KoS to the site admins and KoS's author details did not include an e-mail address - perhaps for the same reasons your review doesn't. There's nothing cowardly about stating one's opinions if you're ready to stand up for them. Real cowardice would be if I took a swipe at someone without making it possible for them to respond, as you have. As for getting my panties in a bunch? Well, since I'm a guy that should be boxers and my response to that would be that anything you care about is worth worrying about. I'm sure there are some awful fics for other shows, but since NGE is one of my favourites it's the one I'm going to worry about. I've done what I can to let people know about KoS and provoke discussion - from there they can make their own decisions. That's all I wanted to accomplish and I have.

P.S: My various stories, between them, have received about a hundred reviews. Not a single negative one has been signed. I'm not afraid to put my author name and e-mail address behind my opinions so why the hell can't some of you grow spines and do the same damn thing?

A good written story.

But I can't say that I agree completely with your AN.

If you think that the stories of KoS are sick, you should search a little in different newsgroups.

KoS had at least an acceptable writing style, although the plots left a lot to be desired.

You are right, he wrote not FF but porn.

But I see no problem with that.

Your little speech of "disrespect" etc. reminds me too much of a purists view to be comfortable with.

I don't like extremists.

You wasted a lot of time writing this "critical response".

KoS writes porn for shits and giggles and to get peoples' rocks off. He's not looking to create any literary achievement, or even have any literary merit whatsoever. He doesn't care.

And what's this bullshit about disrespecting the series and Anno? Jesus Christ. It's not like Evangelion is the only thing that has fanfiction written for it. You should try reading that Lion King fanfiction about Mufasa raping Nala or whatever the hell her name was... it exists, I saw it posted somewhere once.

I can't believe you're getting your panties in a bunch over THIS.

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