love it

This is really good, I thought you captured the characters really well and any gaps in English were unnoticed as a result of the lovely story you wove. I do hope you write again, I'd love to read it.

Bravo! Nice way to end.

Hey, there, JerseyGirl, like your style! Interesting story, good overall organization and development. You had guessing toward the very end - after J and MP had been together. Her having keys is one thing, but making a decision, closing the car door, putting the keys into her pocket, and going back to where Jarod is is something else - something truly wonderful. As we all know, MP does not always make the best personal choices. In your story, she had your guidance and did the right thing. Finally the woman has come to her senses and realized that Jarod is good for her, to her, and that he loves her. Good work - as I said before. Please continue writing for us. We all appreciate the ones who do such good Pretender fanfiction for us to read. More soon!

That was great! a great end to a great story. Good job!

That was great! a great end to a great story. Good job!

This was an absolutely wonderful story Jerseygirl! This was very enjoyable reading, and I do hope that one day you might consider doing another story!

A simply fabulous chapter! I wonder how Parker will react to what Jarod just said? Pleae post again soon!

keep on the very great work. :-)

Broots and Sydney are in a tight spot - Sydney has given some good advice to Broots: just leave a little out, anything so that the search for MP won't be 100% realistic. J and MP - alone and beginning to talk. I hope that it works. They are both in lots of pain - from their real lives, years and years of pain, and the very recent pain of Ethan being killed. Hope that you help them heal and work together, to grow comfortable togethr, to love together. Well, I want them together forever - and happily together forever. Good work - keep writing. Post again soon. Thanks!

This was a great follow-up chapter to 10, and I hope you don't keep us waiting for the next chapter for too long!

Sorry to see Ethan go but Lyle? No way! More please!

Hi - just got to chapters 10 and 11 - great reading! I am very glad that J got to MP and Ethan first. Who would have guessed that some muse was shining upon Lyle and helped him get quickly to J, MP, and Ethan? I hate the position that Lyle put MP into - but she did the best she could and now hates herself because Ethan was murdered by Lyle. Well, I am sorry that Lyle killed Ethan. I am not sorry that Lyle is gone. I am concerned about J and MP - they have both been hurt so much and they have both come so far. I will leave it all in your capable hands. But, I imagine that they still have bridges to cross and miles to go before they can sleep. Good luck - keep posting in such a timely fashion. The story has force of character. Thanks for sharing!

This is quite wonderful I love it. I really do hope you update soon I can't only be patient for so long Sniff Sniff please don't keep me waiting to long.

I can't wait to see what happens next!