You should go back over this chapter, I found a lot of words were not spaced out (ex. Harryand Ron, Theydidn't, aSlytherin, andstunned, lightheartedlyan, emotionalmood-swings, Hermione'swhereabouts.) and that's only a few. It was hard reading it because of this.

I really enjoyed the "You...git" part xD
This is one of the better fanfic I've read, good job!

Really enjoying the story.

Just one thing about this chapter. I don't think "adversible" is a word although I sort of understood what you meant. "Adverse" is a word and that seems to be what you were thinking of but in that sentence "adverse" can't just be used were you had "adversible". I think it would require a complete rework of that sentence.

Before the final reveal of the rabbit at the end of the chapter - I was thinking "Definitely a Malfoy". Looking forward to the next chappy... I really should go to bed though instead of continuing to read. Hmmmm...

not sure if your even still here but its Avada Kedavra not Avada Kebadra. Man I sound like Hermione

your story is interesting but... really kinda annoying, first of all harry is incredibly stupid in this... but what annoys me the most out of everything is that you have not once told us what year they are in (oliver wood left the school after third year, and they didn't learn about time turners till after third year, and voldemort didn't return till the end of fourth... ) I have finally been forced to guess that they are in their fifth year... BUT YOU HAVEN'T TOLD US SO I CAN'T BE SURE...

What I want to know is how old he is, and Sirius, Remus, etc.

Hey, i really liked you fic, thanks for the read!

Mere ;P

It's very good, obviously - I mean, if it weren't, I bloody well wouldn't still be reading after seventeen chapters. But either you or I have got to be retaught our Unforgivables - it's "Avada Kedavra" rather than "Avada Kadabra", is it not?

this is so good! I spent 2 whole days reading. Yeah, I have no life. Oh well. Lol. Anyways, yeah, its awesome!(:

Take out all the physcobabble, and all of your chapters are short! This is chapter 28, and if you wrote a proper chapter, it should only be chapter 16!

You waste space with all your physcobabble at the begging of the chapter; and you do not properly end a chapter before you start more physcobabble! Keep your comments to a minimum, and maybe you will get people to actually enjoy your writing.

I do enjoy what I can read of your story, I just get discouraged with all the crap before and after the chapter.

This is a very interesting story. I really like it. The plot's different from most anything I've ever read, and the characterization fits.

Personally, I didn't see any 'slashy undertones,' and I'm very happy I didn't. Any romance isn't needed in this. It stands on plot and friendship just fine!

UPDATE! awsome job I hope you update soon, happy writing.

XD

abra kadabra? is it ment to say that or is a typo.

Suposed to be

*avada kedavra

wow *muches on 'gourmet mix jelly bean'

More chapters, yay!