It is very well written. I admire your use of the language. I, for one, would be killed at once by my English teacher for disobeying the rules of making a sentence... Please update it.

Oh no! No da! Why haven't you updated on this wonderful story? Kill Dong Zhou! JA! Don't let Jiang Wei be stuck there forever! No da! Update! JA!

hmm...two apologies. 1.) this is a late review. 2.) you said you're not going to finish it. ANyways, i thought I'd let you know that, although you might not finish it, this is a well-written story with a nice plotline. good job!

I've been silently waiting for an update for years. And I'll wait for years more. Please, please continue! I love the way the story is headed and call me a sadist but I would like to see poor Jiang Wei raped. Hurt/Comfort is one of my favorite reading materials.

T_T ...This needs to be continued...I'm, er, late...but seriously, it's a shame to leave it like this...

NO! This can't be it! *crying* This fic is so awesome!

Ooh, god, Yeu. I love this fanfiction.. But it seems like forever since you last updated. T_T Please do so soon!

HI! i love this story _ tho i hope u dont rape Jiang *sniffle* hes suppose to be made for Zhao! Update soon *_*

O.O oh, no! Poor Jiang Wei! *sniffle* Wah, you'd better update soon! T.T

YOU MUST CONTINUE THIS! Oh my God, this is such a beautiful story! I couldn't stop reading it! WOW! You're a great writer. I love your writing style. This story is so well-written - please continue this wonderful story!

Please update soon!

I would just like to say great story. I can't wait for the next chapter. And I would also like to apply for the job of beta reader, that is if you haven't already got one.

...oh my god...

Cliffhanger! You made a cliffhanger! Well, I consider it a cliffhanger. Still a great story. Very well written. I hope you update soon, just so I can see what happens next.

Grammar has improved SIGNIFICANTLY, i cannot put any more emphasis on the improvement. Wonderful job! However, verb tense does need to remain consistent. If you prefer the style of writing in present tense, follow that. otherwise, consistent past tense would work too. Again, i enjoyed the clever play of words from Jiang Wei. You successfully describe the vile and fiendish character that Dong Zhuo is - simply, you're great with words. Zhen Ji has never appeared in the despicable light until now, she seemed so acrid and harsh.

Tsk tsk, what is Dong Zhuo going to do to our poor Boyue? Hopefully Zilong comes to rescue him soon. Update soon... i think all the readers appreciated the long chapter _

*shudder* I hate Dong Zhuo. He's just...eew. I think you really captured him with the bit about him enjoying torture, but hating blood. That just really seems to fit his character, or at the impression of him that I've always had.

FFn doesn't allow NC-17 anymore, but depending on how detailed your descriptions are, there's a fine line between NC-17 and a hard R.

There are still a few errors with verb tense here and there...but if you need a beta reader, I'd be glad to volunteer. Drop me an email () or buzz me on AIM (NodionPrincess) if you're interested! _