Gah. Just finished reading all of the chapters I never read...Which was like...28. A lot of typing for you, eh?

Anyway, on to the review.

There's a lot of emotions in here. Written out though, the words you use don't fully express them. To me at least. I keep catching myself and finding that people wouldn't talk like the way you make them...Unless they were slightly old fashioned. But maybe you meant to write it like that. In which case, my bad! :D

Also, there's a lot of description. It seems to be drawn out, not really for the purpose of understanding...Just to be there. A lot of filler. That made me kinna bored. To just be reading. *shrug* Again. Might just be me.

Dun dun dun. Watch out for mistakes too. I found a buncha typos in there. But not as many as some people. :P Anyway, hope ya keep writing. I'm interested as to seeing how this ends.

The End.

-El Takeshiro

*gasps* That last bit . . . so creepy! Good for you, kid! That's the way to keep 'em comin'!

Wow. Apparently, Cole has more than one side to him (not that that hasn't been obvious for a while, heh). I like that way of bring it across, though! Big impact!

More! More!

Y'know, I think I like Christie. I respect the faith she has in Cole and the others. Lord knows, someone needs to believe in them! Not so sure about Duke, though . . . Oh well. It was just a dream. As long as he doesn't actually do anything. _

Welp, I'm off to read chapter 35!

Hey, li'l bro! Woah, compact, electric chapter ya got here (for whatever reason it strikes me as one that moves the characters along). I kinda felt sorry for Matt. I don't think he's in his right mind (as Maddox pointed out). The bit with Cole at the beginning, forgive me, reminded me of a scene I happened to catch a glimpse of, of Dragonball Z. lol.

Hm, I'm curious as to what is on the other side of that deminsional wall. Are we gonna find out?

*claps hand over mouth* No, no. I'll wait!

Keep it comin', kid, you're doing great!

It's been a while since you updated, li'l bro. I might have to reread the story.

Short chapter, but good. It gets the point across very well. I liked the part towards the end where he's talking about the biggest threat to himself being himself. There's a dilema for you. And the poor guy has already been though so much. I'm glad Maddox is there. Hopefully he can help him get through this.

I hope up update again soon!

(note: Sorry about the computer problems!)

man. it took me forever to finally read up to here! i just started reading this yesterday! great stuff! super snazzy. love the concept!

update soon!

Hey! Lord only knows if this will come through or not, seeing as how our computers SUCK, but it's worth a try anyway. : )
Great chapter, kid, as always! I kinda knew Maddox wasn't all bad, even at the beginning - and I'm glad, too. The last chapter he was in (besides 27 that is) had me feeling all sorry for him. Poor guy had a hard life. Sounds like the Sailor Soldiers will be undergoing some fierce training there. Maddox seems like he could be quite a taskmaster if he chose to be. Anyway. Update soon so we can all find out what happens next!

Gah. I just read all the chapters that aren't posted on the board! I had forgotten about this story until I signed in and looked at my favorite stories! It's turning out really good J.C.! It's kinda depressing, but you were always the master of morbidness. Have a good V-day!
-PA

A nice balance between dialogue and description. An intresting concept. Thus far there seems to be very little emotional connection between the characters, their script, their actions, and the other characters. Granted, guys are less emotionally unbalanced than girls but certainly there must be some ambition, like or dislike, or motivation in there somewhere ;)

interesting spin I hope you keep writing

ohh what r they doin there 24 hrs early? couldn wait? well write more ASAP!

TOODLES!

oh where will they end up? dum dum dum write more ASAP! TOODLES!

OMG TYPICAL teh cops get there just as the baddies leave gettin the GD guys into shit..OHH whats happening nxt? cant wait...what will they do? did his mum live? OHH WRITE MORE ASAP!

TOODLES!

Maddox, huh? *grins* Too bad he's a freakin' bad guy . . . Oh well . . .

Why do the police have to be such idiots? At least in books, stories, and movies, they seem to be. Poor Matt, I hope he doesn't do anything stupid. I doubt his father would want him to rush into anything that would end up getting HIM killed, too. But, he probably will, and I can't say that anyone would blame him.

This is a very complex story. It keeps readers on their toes - great job! *smiles*

Great chapter! It was really, really sad (uh, yeah, even more sad than before . . . heh . . .). Poor Uranus and Saturn, having to see all that. Poor Cole for having to deal with those deaths every day of his life . . . I was wondering what had happened to Pluto and Neptune. Horrible. Guilt runs rampant, doesn't it?

*sigh* This is a fantastic, story, kid. You had better not give up on it!