Great job! LOVE IT!

Brilliant poem! I like it. And River did such a great job portraying Mike in the film too.

Keep up your awesome, super-cool, very brilliant and creative writing! :)

A big fan of My Own Private Idaho. You captured Mike's character wonderfully, and this is a great poem. And yes, I agree with the other reviewer who said that Keanu was a jerk for breaking Mike's heart.

Amazing. Just saw this movie today and loved it, and your poem connected so well with it. But even if none of the above were true, I could still relate. So beautiful. Love it.

Beautiful.

Just finished MOPI (My own.. :P) now, for the I don't know how many time, and I read this and it really moved me.

I can SEE Mike, walking his road, maybe sleeping somewhere, and just feel him.

Really hated Keanu's character in this movie for breaking poor Mike's heart.

Wonderful, and well written.

Great interpretation on the character

i was just looking at your bio. and looking at your stories and saw this poem. Pretty much anything having to do with river phoenix i read...lol...what a great poem. Seriously, it was a wonderful work a literature...lol...that sounds so gay. I like the line "With a neon halo from a No Vacancy sign" and "Will you travel this road with me?It goes all the way around the world
Will you let me fall asleep in your arms?" i can just see him falling asleep, poor guy. I rented this movie more then once, and every time i do my friend laugh and say is that the one where the house falls down and the bunny? The first time i watched it with them, i couldn't help but laugh at that part. They couldn't stand watching it, so we watch something else, but i watched the rest, on my own. And although it was strange at times, and i have a strong feeling i'm missing some sort of symbol or some piece of the puzzle, i still like it. It's a great film, although the ending is so depressing and void of hope...but ohh well. Anyway sorry this was soo long, but nice work! i like your stories, they're usually very well writen and this one is no exception. Good job

Not bad. Not bad at all. This movie was the best... Sigh. Poor Mike-the-Dyke. Someone stole his shoes...

I just saw My Own Private Idaho yesterday. Some coincidence, huh?

Anyway, as poetry goes, especially on this site, it's pretty good. I like the first stanza the best, particularly the imagery of "neon halo" and all that implies. You do a good job capturing Mikey's thoughts and his weariness, but it would be even better if you were more subtle about it. Remember how in the movie it would suddenly show a memory of his mother? Try inserting images like that, things that aren't spelled out for the reader. Also, the movie had so many interesting facets; try incorporating more of them. I'm assuming the "you" is Scott here. If so, throw in a concrete moment from the film (or just make one up). The road is a nice metaphor, one that appears throughout the film, but you need to make it more personal and human. Good start, and you have the character's voice down. With a few revisions this poem could be great.