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Fine, just give me a moment to collect my shattered heart.

Right, okay. I think you definitely pinpointed the emotions and mania perfectly. It felt adequately discombobulated. I don’t know if you intended the exact plot to be more clear—at the moment it seems detached, almost dissociative, which I think works well with the theme. Overall, I’m always down for some sad, sad Maitimo, so this was a fun read!

What have you done indeed? Oh and one other question. WHY? Why rip him and my to shreds like that? It’s just not okay that Mandos should be a place of such torture for him, who has suffered so much, alone in the dark, waiting for torture and hoping for death. T.T

Didn’t expect Feanor to just about make me cry. He certainly had time to ponder which he valued more, his jewels, or his sons, in the long ages he spent in the halls alone.

*chants* Let Nerdanel hold her child!

As the previous reviewer pointed out there are quite a few grammatical errors in this one. I know you probably wrote it with a lot of feels and only a little time so no blame or shame whatsoever, but maybe look it over when you have time, or get someone to Beta it. :)

Till next time mellon!

Oh, God, this is so good! Though I found some mistakes:
"It would have brought a tinge if warmth to his heart had he been truly aware." I believe it should be "of" instead of "if".
"Faces of those who's Light fled their eyes as he withdrew his blood-stained sword."
It should be "whose", not "who's". Also, why is "light" written with a capital letter? I am not sure if this is a mistake or not.
Other than those small ones I didn't find any others, but I am not a native English speaker so I may have missed something. Anyway, I love this story and the series! Please continue!