| Reviews for What If Mary Jane Watson Became Spider-Girl? |
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   jettmanas chapter 4 . 7/15 Nice dialogue between Cobbwell, Peter, and MJ. Interesting mystery with the electronics. I know the Tinkerer is trouble. Solid buildup of tension. And what a bad twist for them. Good thing they're alive indeed! |
| Boris Yeltsin chapter 4 . 7/15 I say keep it going. |
| jettmanas chapter 3 . 7/13 Good setup on the Vulture. I liked his monologue, followed by MJ cutting in. Nice contrast w/him being an old guy, and her being a young woman. Solid danger w/the web being cut, then her witty comments and capture. Fun scene after with her friends. I liked the info on Peter. Fun chapter. |
| Boris Yeltsin chapter 3 . 7/13 More excellent work. |
| OBSERVER01 nli chapter 1 . 7/8 Nice start. Keep up the good work. |
| Nothingspecial43 chapter 2 . 7/10 This has that cheassy feel and I don't mind it. What I do mind is the lack of world building when comes to this what if story. What makes it so different than the canon besides MJ being spider girl? What type of relationships does MJ have compare to Peter? Most importantly, who is MJ before and after getting bit by the spider? I personally believe creative thinking like this will improve your writing. Let's see what happens next. See ya whenever. |
| jettmanas chapter 2 . 7/10 Nice difference w/MJ telling Anna and not keeping it secret. Good advice given, and costume info. I liked the entertainer idea, and Flash having a fan club. Also, her reaction, and Peter's. Solid conflict from Liz. Enjoyed the talk after. The death of someone else spurring a call to action was interesting. Great chapter. |
| Boris Yeltsin chapter 2 . 7/10 More great work here. |
| Rivet94 chapter 2 . 7/10 hey, this is developing nicely, keep up the good work |
| Rivet94 chapter 1 . 7/7 does the fingertip webbing means her power set is closer to Silk? in any case great start |
| jettmanas chapter 1 . 7/7 Yes, glad to do that art! Solid opening w/the Watcher. I remember him and What If? I liked the mention of others who'd been explored in the scenario. Nice setup of MJ and Peter meeting earlier in this world. Good concern from her of the experiment, and it setting up the events after. Enjoyed her dialogue w/her friends. Fun twist w/the webbing shot stopping that would-be killer. Great descriptions of her discovering her powers. Then the return to reality. Well done! |
| Boris Yeltsin chapter 1 . 7/7 Love it, though I haven't seen Spider-Man anything in years. |
