Well I hope there’s more romance between Blu and Jewel

The wait was worth it, as this is an excellent chapter and your best so far. Hopefully the next chapter takes a little less time to come out. By off chance I was listening to Starless, by King Crimson, and it was quite fitting for this chapter.

It also seems that you put the announcement chapter back up, because I don't think I'd be able to post this review under my signed username. Of course, I can post this as a guest, and have my name be Prof Ass Spiders, as I do in instances where I already posted a review.

This is similar to my Little Blue Orphan story, except mine is far darker. Perhaps I'm just an idiot who draws similarities in stories, which is likely the case.

The flashbacks and moments of panic are quite cool, (not for Blu though) but I do feel as though him seeing the empty hollow would trigger more of a reaction. To be fair, he is still confused by all this. I also like the detail where Blu exhausts himself by flapping too much as this is his first time flying about for a while. I never thought of that before, so good job.

I didn't notice many typos, but there was a few instances where a full stop is placed either unnecessarily altogether, or its placed where a comma would work just fine.

Apart from all that, this chapter is your best so far, and I figuratively can't wait for the next chapter. Though I may not be 100% sure, I'm still... working it out.
gotcha bitch

Sincerely,
Proffesor Ass Spiders

WHo the fuck care no one actually cares

Burn the homework and threaten to blow up your school if they give you homework. Simple solution.
Hope you don't fail and stuff. I pity you because my school doesn't do homework. (Except during the COVID lockdown)

Your life is more important, good luck with everything and i hope i can return to this story pretty soon!

Okay, that explains how I missed 2 chapters being uploaded.
I congratulate you for having Blu's ability to fly come from practice rather than him sponatneously learning how to fly. Thank you for not doing the "SaMbA iN yOuR hEaRt AnD yOu FlY, bEcAuSe SaMbA aNd ThE hEaRt MaKeS yOu FlY, rAtHeR tHaN tHe BrAiN aNd FlUiD iN yOuR eArS, lIkE wItH rEaL bIrDs" thing. Thank you, I hate the heart being the centre of emotion thing/your heart guiding you. The only thing the heart does is circulate blood, I think the spleen produces/filters blood. The centre of emotions is the frontal lobe.

You still managed to put in the Figuring It Out line.
Why do you do this, I don't know, like you I'm still... figuring it out. hahaahahahhahahhahahahahhahahahahhahahahahha kill me

Anyway, it sucks that you overdosed on sleeping pills. I once needed melatonin tablets, but it eventually screwed up my schedule as for whatever reason I fought the sudden wave of tiredness. After that I struggled to sleep. My body produced less melatonin I think, and eventually I stopped taking them. Since I have been sleeping better than I did on the tablets, or before them I think. It may not work for you, as you may have insomnia for all I know. Which is probably the case considering you took sleeping pills. I'd recommend being careful next time.

Anyways, a minor flaw is Jewel mentioning her mother died a few days after she hatched. Macaw chicks are born blind and helpless, and so they'd probably be capable of flight a few months into their lives. I'd say that Jewel should've been about a year or two old. For Blu, I would've suggested making him a month old or something. Then again, in Rio it seems that birds are born feathered. But I did realise that hatchday may not be the day she was hatched. With Blu I just realised you never mentioned his age, so this entire paragraph is pointless. Oh well, I'm still... figuring it out.

help

Well let’s see how Jewel will react to him flying

Great story and chapter!

FIGURE IT OUT

Great job

I bet you are thinking of every possible way you could include the phrase 'figuring it out' in a sentence. I bet this will be kept up with every chapter. How you could do this I'm not sure, but I'm sure you're... figuring it out...

Anyways, I love this idea of Jewel having PTSD, and I've only seen this in a story by VPVPVP, where Jewel freaks out when some characters are watching Bambi and the forest fire scene comes on. I'd suggest Jewel talks about her dream, and Blu comforts her and shows her she's not alone. Have Blu recall the day he was captured to her, that way neither feel alone with their traumatic experiences.

To be honest, I never thought about Jewel having PTSD. Every scenario involving PTSD in a Rio story that I have thought of recently either involves Blu or an OC, but not Jewel.

For some critique, there are quite a few sentences that are missing words or sentences with the wrong words used. Others are cut off, when a comma would suit just fine. But apart from that this is a solid chapter with some good emotions. Not enough to make me cry, (I am a bitch when it comes to reading stories, but I am less likely to cry from reading a story than I used to) but it does make me feel sorry for her, and I did feel a bit emotional.

Sincerely,
Proffesor Ass Spiders

Well that was horrible, sad at how Jewel lost her mother, glad Blu is comforting her

Jesus Christ, how do you manage to sleep in until 2pm? Your sleeping schedule must be fucked! The latest I could sleep in is 10am or something.
Anyways, I do like the wonderful usage of Figuring It Out as a pun of sorts, or some other joke type that I don't know the name of.

I can't offer much constructive criticism, apart from some sentences being too short. What I mean is that you sometimes put a full stop, when a comma would work out fine. This is a minor nitpick, and it corresponds mostly to my style of writing.

I also noticed you seemingly taking certain quips/sentence ideas from One-Winged Angel, (for this chapter, it is when Blu was unsure/awkward about comforting other birds, as his only experience with comforting others was by rubbing his face against Linda) that's cool I guess. I actually did this quite a bit in my early days of writing. (i.e 2 months ago) I included the word 'seemingly', as it could be just coincidence or you subconsciously including it. Idk

I figuratively can't wait for chapter 3.
Sincerely,
Proffesor Ass Spiders

Well let’s see where this goes from here, hope they get closer each day