Not bad, and very entertaining.

arrrrrghhh,im so excited for another update...really wwant to see the asari and batarians expressions when the choass warband begins to massacre their planet XD

LOOOOOL,tghhis is gonna be gold when choas wage war on batarians
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Good chapter!

Waiting for the coin to drop ;D Also, I think the missing Astronomicon should be a tip off. Even Chaos should be able to see it's not there.

Don't understate the power of the Astartes, they should be able to run roughshod over pretty much everything that ME can throw at them.

Update again soon please! :)

Well this story has hit all the correct notes! Eager to see what will come.

Nicely done I am a fan already. Wonder what is gonna happen to Arai when the warsmith comes a knocking? Also are warp mutations still a thing cause thats gonna change alot for any psyker.

I love how events are progressing. Also, it makes sense that a lot of the people on Omega would be cooperative. Most of them are criminals after all, and they understand the importance of bowing down to the most dominant force.

Khay just secured himself an important position among the Iron Warriors.

Forgot to mention this before, but you might want to change the summary. I admit that I skipped reading this story a few times because I saw 'what happens' in the description. That's usually a sign the story is from a newbie. Either that or they use 'what if.'

Try and make the summary a bit more dramatic or poetic. Maybe even vague to convey the feeling of loss and the eagerness for a new beginning from the Iron Warriors.

It is funny how they describe Omega one of the biggest space stations in ME universe as just nothing special :) This contrast between how the Iron Warriors see things and how ME things are in ME universe :) Also I like that hint in the previous chapter that for the Chaos Space Marines now this call of Chaos is weaker and weaker, like their minds are less cloudly. As for omnitools, they should have looted many of them on this small fuel station. I really hope that Aria will get very rought treatment and some date with a chainsword. I really don't like her, a poorly done character. This oh so great crime lord of Omega, who doesn't do anything in ME2 except being there and being oh so great crime kingpin, totally unnecessary. She even doesn't provide much climate for the game. And in ME3 this negative character, criminal, scum etc. sudennly is good and we are helping her to retake te station, instead of shoot her and bring the station for the civilized control.

I really like this. Iron warriors are one of my top traitor legions and it is nice to see you do them justice. Funny thing is that while these guys won't make a difference in their own setting (like 90% of everything in 40k), but here they make for a riveting plot for all galaxy.
Poor sorcerer tho.

Awesome story so far

Nice start with the first three chapters. You are using a definitely underused faction, this gives extra points for originality. You characterised the Iron Warriors well. The mix between unrestrained violence and careful deliberation fits them. Then there are the inner rivalries among the leadership of the warband. It would not be a Chaos warband without them.

Its not often i feel bad for Batarian. But with C.S.M., everyone comes up short in the evil department.

God I am loving this fanfic, this is so cool

Man this story is awesome. I can't wait to watch the radical destabilization of Omega as the new King take his throne, at least that's how I think things are gonna turn out. Poor Garrus though he's gonna get wrecked when the Sons arrive.

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