Hmmm first time reading this AU and i was searching for it since i found some fanart of it and fell in love. Now when i read this, i think you should go for more details and more monologues so that readers can see that character's personality and the difference between OG GF and this AU GF cuz you want this much more different than OG, the fun and comical contrast to the 20's dark and moody time. I just want to say this because I love this AU because of the 20's depression state where crime is big, gangsters are more common and alcohol is the rage. I hope you go to that direction but if not i will still read it. Anyway writing is fine and i didn't see any misspelling, it's pretty clean and good so hope you do more!
-DipperFan16

Looks good. I'm just going to imagine Bill as his fat triangle self cause it reminds me of an ugly Eggman and I hate the tall, handsome fan version.

Also, are there any Bill ships cause Bill ships are a repellent for me.