Really enjoying this story! As for suggestions, depending on how long you want the entire story to be, maybe slow down the pacing of their relationship if you want it to be a bit longer. If not, keep doing what you're doing.

For a more chapter-specific suggestion, I would suggest to really focus on the pace that events happen and to write more or write less depending on how much information the characters would absorb. For example, the moment when they're at the top of the ferris wheel would be longer and more drawn out with lots of little details because the characters would notice and feel those details more than if, say they were just walking from point A to point B. That pacing makes it more relateable and more impactful when the large events actually happen. I didn't mean for this review to be so long, but keep up the great work! Can't wait for the next chapter!

That's cute, I really like how you're handling the characters, looking forward to the next chapter.

Love the way you incorporated the little details of their typical carefree lifestyles. A lot of people can't seem to get that right but I think you do a great job at it. Also love the personalities of the fireside girls. Your descriptions of them give the perfect cartoon-esque mental image. Keep up the great work!

Well, I like where this is going so far, if this is actually your first time writing then I'm impressed. I wouldn't mind the Perry storyline but it doesn't bother me either way, it's up to you.

Sounds cute! I like it! Please update soon!

cant wait to read more keep it up