okay, the only problem for me in this chapter is how good you make pyrha in analyzing jaune personality, because in canon she, jqune and ruby are in same spectrum of social akwardness, if it read someone in combat stuff it's believable but can analyse someone personality and psychological state like an expert? for me that's weird, it's more believable if the one do analyzing is glynda

Facinante, el desarrollo de weiss fue muy peculiar. Pero realista, la parte de Yang me intriga, supongo que más adelante sabremos más. El equipo hermano será mencionado?.
Mucha suerte y espero con ansias el siguiente capítulo.

Good story so far it's pretty interesting. Maybe his semblance is the ability to form his weapons out of hard light? I dunno but I'll eagerly await the next chapters man. 10/10

I feel I should mention some things. Jaune from the start was strong. We also do not know if he worked for his goals or not.

Dude this is good!

I would suggest dropping the 'hood' of robinhood, it doesn't quite fit with the naming themes. Just robin or some other name would be better

Definitely an interesting story. Can't wait to see how it progresses.

Interesting story so far and you somewhat addressed one of the problems I had with the story. It would interesting to see where you go from here and who all will be with Jaune. However I'm wondering how Yang and Weiss became partners while the scene where both Ruby and Weiss fall from the sky stayed the same (essentially at that point they were already teamed together unless something happened before then). Overall keep up the good work.

Interesting so far, though confusing at times on who is actually in control, Jaune or William. I mean it sounded like Jaune was initially the one who was in control and William would simply advise but instead it seems their is only one body with two separate minds trying to control it at the same time. The other thing I'm confused about is Nora being called pinkette when her hair is orange, unless you're referring to the pink of her clothes (but usually such names refer to hair color more than anything else). Besides those two things keep up the good work.

This is what I look for in stories, a mature main character. I loathe immaturity which is why I’ll never read a story with Ruby as the MC. Good job fam

Really interesting so far! Love what you are doing, keep up the good work :)

I like how Jaune hasn’t a just accepted William yet. Makes more sense then instant acceptance.

Well now, this looks interesting. Can't wait to read more.

Good chapter once again! Could tone down the swearing though, I mean, its jaune we're talking about lol. William seems like a cool dude, if a bit serious, which I actually appreciate. Overall this feels really good.

La introducción de los personajes fue espectacular, la historia tiene ese gancho Ale te deja deseando más. La idea de fusionar sus mentes pero la tener una separación de mentes es muy emocionante. Se fucionaran los demás con Jaune?. Espero con ansias el siguiente capítulo muchas gracias.