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Woo, I can't wait to see how this will play out. Keep up the great work and be safe.

love it.
please write more.

Slytherin

nice story so far

slytherin founder quarter

It's your story so it really doesn't matter.

Liked it, more please .

slytherin

great fan fic so far, keep up the good work!

Interesting story so far. Only critique is to do a final read through the chapter before posting. There were several sentences with missing words which can make it hard to understand. Other than that, great job!

How about putting Harry in Slytherin (easier for him to be with Daphne and to deal with the Death Eaters' sons and daughters, plus it can add one element of bashing against Dumbledore/Neville/Hermione)? I know this is way too frequently used but it may be easier I suppose.

Nice chapter.

I think Slytherin :)

Interesting ideas. However:

1 - Please find a beta reader. Your spelling isn't bad, but you have a lot of typos (you describe Daphne's eyes as *blonde*, for instance). A second set of eyes will likely catch most of these and make for a better story.

2 - I'd recommend combining into 2 or 3 chapters. You're mostly setting up background here and bouncing all over the place. If you haven't outlined your story, I also recommend you do so.

3 - You're doing far too much "tell" as opposed to "show". The confrontation between Daphne and Draco on the train, for instance.

4 - Too many flashbacks for my taste. Flashbacks break up the flow of the story. The flashback in this chapter, for example, could go as a follow-on scene much earlier.

5 - Personal opinion here: 15 is too young to be married, and of questionable legality. If you mean for them to be betrothed only, with the marriage planned to take place after they're done with school, you need to make that clear.

Again, you've got some interesting ideas and potential for a good story here.