Since this is your first smut fic, I commend you for going all out with it. I know that it's hard (pun intended) to sometimes jump straight into the good stuff, but you did it with a remarkably nice pace and overall good flow. I would recommend you avoid ~ (aka tildas) to indicate an upturn in the voice, and I also advise you to not use to word nectar to describe most anything. However, characters were quite set and did not shift from their appointed roles, and I do admit, I had a lot of fun reading this! I look forward to whatever else you decide to write.

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that was so fucking hot man, really loved Sarah's characterization and the smut itself was raw and scintillating.

do you take requests?