I love Shaun of the dead! Nice reference

Word of advice, format your stories. Seperate the paragraphs, add spaces where they should go, and just overall format in the way you want your story pacing to be. Without formatting the story, it kinda just seems rushed and feels like it should be read lighting quick. The way you format and present the story is the way it's read. Sure some parts maybe you want to read quickly because that's what the scene and tone calls for, but some parts you may want to space out and slow down the pacing. Formatting helps add to the story and the pacing of it. Just a small tip.

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