I stumbled onto this story mainly for Rangers, and this definitely felt like a corrective action he'd use for an indignant youth. Jessica's lines also felt accurate to her character.

Your writing style is good, but you did slip into narrative present tense a few times despite using narrative past tense for most of the story. It's a minor trifle, but one that can easily be fixed with due diligence.

As for Lava, some details did feel like it'd match her (taking up cigs to rebel against her health nut sister Hibiscus and making graffiti art in Lungmen to vent her frustration with being cooped up inside Rhodes Island for so long), but I don't think she'd go so far as to implicate herself or jeopardize RI's contract with Lungmen by drawing the RI logo of all things (you have Dobermann mentioned alongside Doctor and she never met Doctor directly until the Chernobog rescue mission, but if the LGD have any sense of detective work they'd question RI about a possible breaking of terms).

Lastly, I find it curious you had Ace appear in this work, if this piece IS set during said contract: Ace died against Talulah during said mission to buy time for Doctor and Amiya's team to return to RI.

If you were planning to edit the work in response to this criticism, you could have Lava do graffiti of a different logo instead of RI, have Dobermann conduct the training drill instead of Ace, and keep Ace as a posthumous mention (such as being one of Lava's previous instructors).

All in all, this was a good story, and especially a good first story on this site for Rangers.

he going to spank doctor next