You made two mistakes since you said Charizard was a ground type and have him feeling pain and losing from a electrical attack, may want to fix that unless it was your intention all along.
This is not a flame just constructive criticism.

That was really good, and existing to. Just a little sad it was so short.

I loved it! Please tell everyone on this website to block badboy2000 aka Correy on here. the girl's real name is Lisa Ware Krantz. She has been cyberbullying me for three years. She wants my Nuzlocke Pokemon crossover stories deleted. She has been trying to hack into my nine gmail accounts. She has called them fucking shitty. the stories.

when is Ash going to be in this