I noticed the Despicito the first time Victim spoke and now I can't read what he's saying as anything but what it really is and it's making it very hard to take anything it says seriously.

I like the fanfic. But only one thing, that stands out. In German the words, which are subjekts( for exanple Angst anxiety) are written with a capletter( dont know how to describe it otherwise).

Awesome. 10/10

I had some real problems getting through this chapter, I would highly recommend getting a beta or proofreader. Even something as simple as having an english native speaker looking the chapters over and making some minor corrections would make this sooo much better.

At the moment the tenses are all over the place and I can't figure out if it's supposed to be past or present tense since both are used interchangeably.

Many, if not most, sentences have a syntax that looks like they where written in another language and then translated directly to english without adjusting for english sentence structuring.

These are the two major problems with the story but could both be easily fixed by having a second pair of eyes look the chapters over.

I am of course assuming that you want to improve your writing in general, and this story specifically, if I am wrong about that and this you are fine with your writing as it is then I apologize for the unasked for advice. I'll not continue reading this but you have my thanks for contributing to the pool of available fanfiction regardless.

Take care and wash your hands!

Interesting story. Can't wait to see what will happen next. I'm definitely going to read your other story.

Now I'm interested how the great revival will occur.

I liked the chapter!

The chapter isn't neccesarily lackluster. You introduced the princess, while our main character quickly notices her oddities and setup the need for Galadriel to learn about her swords. Can't wait to see how Lakyus will react when Galadriel Melkor is 'revived'. Maybe she'l be scared, believing she will be punished for having the sword.

You also reunited the sisters, now fully loyal to Nazarick. And also left us some hints for their future.

I've been reading the other fics and I must say, as good as they are, it's quite clear how mandatory it is to read this one first. Which is fine. But you've been giving us more background information in the other crossovers and this one might be left out. For example:

1. In this fic, you mentioned how Galadriel was sexually harrased back at her old job. But in MHA fic, you revealed that she was almost raped and was saved by Touch-Me (which is the reason she loves him). And later, her relationship with him fell after he tried to distance himself.

2. In GoT fic, you mentioned Galadriel's mother, but it wasn't until MHA fic that you went further, explaining how much she loves her mother. The same is the case with her father. While on in MHA, we learned of how she was bullied in school.

I like the idea that each fic is interconnected (in the information aspect, at least), but some readers might find it more of a chore having to check other stories. Also, it's a novelty, but readers down the line might be confused as to which story tackle first.

This is just becoming a rehash of canon 100% even though you attempt to change things here and there. It's quite boring to be honest. I read up to here hoping to see some more divergence but even though you change some things almost everything is the same with slightly different characters, narrations, dialogue and interactions. I'll come back if this fic is ever finished and see where it goes then. For now, I'm going to go read something that is practically a different universe from the original source material. Hopefully.

Me encanto, me lo leí casi de corrido los 28 capítulos, espero con ansias el proximo

Doing that in front of Pandora's Actor is going to make him/it/whatthehelldoyoucalladoppelganger really wanna join Albedo's "search party" to make slaughter and kill any of the guild members they happen to find. I wouldn't blame anyone for doing it, I would probably do the same.

Interesting story.

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once again very good. i'm happy with how often you release chapters even though they are a bit short. i guess its all a fine balance
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