Good chapter
Thanks for your work and the
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Cool chapter, and yeah, with most of the main characters being females, it's obvious Mineta will not get any fans.

Keep the good writing.

I would say good luck but I'll get yelled at instead... (๑・ω-)”

Not really much of anything to say about this chapter. Basically just a transitional chapter, but considering how short it was and how little ended up happening, might as well have just combined it and the next one together.

Hilariously great concept. But you really need a beta.

I hope Hagakure passes so she can finally get a costume. Thanks for the update and I can't wait until you're able to write and post another chapter.

Is Hagakure going to have the option of being visible when shes a magical girl?

"He would have to either live the rest of his life as a woman or die as a man"

I should NOT have laughed at that.

line breaks and background descriptions

It could be that the chapter is short but without them it feels like a fast forward

You are also using too much

"..." said Name A

"..." said Name B

"..." said Name A

"..." said Name B

With only 2 the moment that you end a paragraph the next dialogue will be the turn to speak of the other character unless you say otherwise

"Hello!" Was Chara A cheerful welcome

"Whoa! Where did you come from?"

"From the void of nonexistent"

"..."

0.

You did get better as the chapter went on, dialogues became less robotic and scenes had better descriptions

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The beginning of the chapter was feels like someone driving a car with square shaped wheels, "it moves! Ouch! it moves! Ouch! It moves! Ouch!"

The dialogues were too short so they got cut whenever they began to make the flow of a story

2-

The use of "kacchan" and "deku" was confusing with the dialogues, you can use a single '' or any other () [] {} - set that shouldn't be make said confusion

3.

There are no proper line breaks, you can find said option in the option to edit posted chapters

You should also remember that descriptions to actions or dialogues made by telephone/tv should be written in italics

It helps to make a proper division of who is doing what without affecting each other (different locations) or needing many chapter breaks

4)

For the most part the background was a nonexistent black void

Others occasionally stepped inside of Deku's and Kacchan's lights of existence

5)

Far from the best but equally far from the worst

There are no OCs nor is it a story wort of chunnibyo

I feel that it can get better

6

Why do i feel a challenge to Murphy's law?

great chapters sorry it took me so long to review life gets in the way of reading unfortunately thanks for this update

Smart strategy... (｡’’｡)

Excellent chapter, and good job with Izuku and Momo's strategy.

Keep the good writing.

So this chapter seems to try and address my comments about the ridiculousness behind Hagakure becoming a magical girl, but in the end, it seems to just make things worse. For starters, you don't bother to explain why infrared technology wouldn't be able to work; you just say it wouldn't work and leave it at that, even though that doesn't make sense. Then there's the nonsense of there only being three people with Quirks that could help with that, which is just an utterly ridiculous notion. Again, there are hundreds of millions of people in Japan, yet there are only three people in the entire country who could help with that? And they all conveniently aren't in a position to do so? Get out of here with that nonsense. Then there's the stuff about monetary issues which, again, has never once been a problem in canon for anyone, so there's no reason for why it should be a problem here. Seriously, money has never been made out to be a problem when it came to designing costumes, so it's ridiculous that you're suddenly acting like it is. Also, I don't know why you're saying that the students are given budgets to work on their costumes when it's clearly shown that they just sketch something out and send it to an affiliated company; any sort of budgetary restrictions fall on them, but again, those should either be nonexistent or virtually irrelevant.

All of this feels like a rehash of the nonsense where Todoroki was forced to wear a skirt in that you keep bending over backwards to try and justify it, even though doing so needlessly complicates things far more than just not doing it would. There's absolutely no good reason why Hagakure can't do the same thing that Mirio does, and even if there is something that could logically get in the way, there's always the option of her just wearing fully visible clothes that's just being avoided for no apparent reason. If you want to make Hagakure a magical girl, fine, but the problem is that her reasons are stupid and petty and could easily be solved without forcing Midoriya to compromise his morals, which is why I have a problem with it.

Lol