Please update.

I'll start with this: do you really want to start with a harem? Those are hard to do because you have to build a lot of relationships at the same time in a way that one don't feel forced or dull, take Weisse for example, here you made her a gamer, thats fine and actually an original idea but that alone would not be enough to make her fall for Jaune, at most, it's just one of the first steps towards a friendship. You will have to put a lot of work on keeping this fic from falling on this like a lot did.

That at side, I like the idea: Jaune using both his dancing skills and the sword techniques he saw on videogames is a good idea that no one really uses and I don't know why. You only need to work a bit more on your writting. I do wonder if you will give him his long sword update from vol 4 earlier as it could really work with what he did here, far better than with the normal Crocea Mors at least, and also you can look at Dragons Dogma for some SwordShield techniues for him to use.

Well, thats all for now, I'm looking forward the next one. Good luck.

Please update!

I'm enjoying this so far even though it's a little rough around the edges. Personally I thought that the mid chapter author notes about LOL broke the immersion and could have been added at the end. Another thing was how swapping from Jaune to RWBY and NPR felt a little scattered. I'd recommend just picking one character and giving the group reaction from their perspective instead of a 3rd person omniscient. Otherwise this had the making of a good story and I look forward to reading more of it.

I really hate when Yang does her nicknames.

Vomit Knight, well it's a first for me and certainly an upgrade...of sorts and despite the rather heavy usage of games from our world instead of stand in names, I actually enjoyed it for the fun factor in imagining Jaune pulling off some of the moves from the games.

I look forward to how this story and your skills as a writer grows in the future.

p.s:Gamer Weiss is best Weiss

Much love and much praise to you good sir! For this sort of masterpiece to be your first story surprises me so! But in a good way, seeing as this story of yours seems more like the work of an expert author whom has already made several masterpieces!

I look forward to your bright future in regards to writing stories good sir!

Love your stuff man! I'm happy to help you with this however I can.

ok, where do I begin?

Holy shit this tickled my fancy. I've always been a fan of Jaune thinking like a gamer and stuff, but this honestly takes the cake. Not a bullshit gamer power, but good memory (muscle and otherwise) and some forward thinking skills. I cannot wait for more of this.

If I had to offer some constructive criticism though, your grammar needs some improvement and you have a few run-on sentences. They aren't nearly as bad as some that I've seen, but still needs some work.

Keep it up and keep it going!

That for real was just utterly amazing so please keep up the good work!

I really like the idea behind this story. I can't wait to see what you'll do with it.

That was so good I can't wait to see more. Please add weiss having a fantasy were she's the firekeeper and jaunes the ashen one. Imagine telling him to touch the darkness only for her to lift up her dress. Anyway are you gonna add hand to hand from fighting games aswell I would like to know.

I like this a lot, I think it's really unique and you should definitely update soon.

I love that you had Jaune copy the sword styles from video games rather than give him a system that gives him their powers.

I hope Yang stops calling him Vomit Boy. It’s one of the most annoying parts of her character in early RWBY.