A very good chapter

Dis is so fuck

goooddd

Hola saludos , continua la historia porfis

Interesting start. I hope Loki can be saved.

This is going to be good... a lot better than the original, might want to revisit some sentences and paragraphs to change some partswordflow can be impeded by repeated use of the same word, in the prologue you use "rivulets of red" and then "red rivulets" in the next sentence. Rewriting it to give the same picture but different wording between the sentences may be an idea, or just something to keep an eyeon going forward. Other than that, really good and a follow from me. Keep it up, loving it so far

great. can't wait for more.

cool

I think your writing has vastly improved, the story flows wonderfully and it much more coherent. Thank you for posting.

Seems interesting. Can't wait to see what you do with the re-write. :)