Your innocence is at stake. Jaune can cook and I love his cooking. Usually I’m not one to mention it but you seriously need a beta or an editor to make sure things sound ok.

Is there a part three coming up?

Ruby taking June virgnity and saying it to pyrrha face and the others and she scucced to rub him.

Fue maravilloso, espero con ansias el siguiente capítulo muchas gracias.

This was funny

Next chapter, Ruby forces them to let her help by issuing a Leader order. Or she guilts them by straight up ignoring them.

To be really honest, while the story is well written, I could not enjoy it since the whole premisse here is that Ruby acts like a 10 year old child and everyone else is retatded.

Where is the romcom? The romance is pretty much one sided and the "comedy" part depends upon a weak scenario. The hell, all plot around "Ruby cannot see Jaune's big and red junk" could be solved by throwing a thicker blanket over him.

The humor in the absurd and over the top reaction, in the end, comes out as just annoying.

can't wait for the next chapter and ruby is quite daring

Interesting take, a few spelling and grammar issues I caught, but excusable if not a native speaker. I also had trouble with you referring to a Grimm as a Berserker, unless you meant by action, when the only bear like Grimm I know of are Ursa and Ursa Major. The opening fight was almost like you were implying that an angry Yang was chasing Jaune while catching Ruby doing her magic hands nursing the summary alludes to, and a few times it seemed like you were going for a pun when Ruby said things like loving his cook, rather then finishing out the ‘ing’ of cooking to make sense grammar wise...

Tbh I just skimmed through it. Thousands of words and the questions I asked after reading the plot weren’t really answered. It just got me asking why Ruby is being excluded in this. Seems more like a harem with how every other girl including some stranger girl are the only ones who can see Jaune. I like my Lancaster stories Lancaster

This type of story honestly pisses me off. Ruby is 15, not 5. She isn’t treated her age by her friends, nor does she act her age.

I shouldn’t forget to mention that the entire idea that she can’t see him because it’s an injury to his junk is absurd. Clearly it can be covered, since Yang and Blake has to pull the blanket off of him. If they hadn’t acted so stupidly it would have been an issue.

It is funny! Thanks

MORE! LANCASTER MUST ENSURE!

What the hell is even happening in this story

Nececito ver qué pasa, gran trabajo.