| Reviews for Konosuba Fanworks Short Story Contest Compilation! |
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KonosubaFan64 chapter 2 . 6/26 I agree the first one deserved to win both other 2 stories with Wolbach warmed my heart. How I wish Megumin had a chance to reunite with her master. |
ffapathy chapter 2 . 6/9 Nyaa... So... So much nyaa. The winning story: Very well written. Kazuma sounds like the kazuma in the series. The jokes were pretty good (I particularly liked the brain to muscle ratio one). Chomusuke's cat speak was very consistent, and written into words quite well. The beastmen not being allowed in towns thing caught my eye given there's a bunny eared girl adventurer in the background with the anime. Aquaisuseless: I enjoyed your story. I liked how well you wrote the gag where the girls attack kazuma and the parts where kazuma shows how he's a champion of gender equality. Including the ruling over the domain of violence to wolbach was a nice touch. After giving all the stories a rereading I like that this one didn't have the constant nyaas in it. The nyaa thing has its place but not every story needs it. Dasantihero: It was an alright story. Different from the others given how many metaphors and references were in it which works so long as you know what's being referenced. Betweeniandgirl: I remember this writing style from the last set of stories and I still find it funny to imagine the dialogue and everything taking place with a sort of English speaking Russian accent. That's still not trying to take anything away from the story as I like how crazy things would suddenly pick up all of the sudden and it made for a comedic read in a different way from how konosuba's comedy normally comes off as. Herozombie1: Decent enough story for a little short contest. Definitely felt like it was more on the slice of life side and less of the comedy side but that's not necessarily a bad thing. Given I'm not much of a writer I wonder if there's a way to better format some of the first person thoughts and dialogue as there were a few parts where they seemed a little intermixed. Israel pena: I really liked this one. Everyone seemed quite in character. I liked how even though this version of chomusuke was described as having the mind of a cat she still displays human like emotions and behavior. Megumin and kazuma getting caught up and embarrassed in the whole catgirl daughter thing made for a very amusing read. Given the inclusion of kazumin and everything in general I'd have given this story my vote. Meyahviing: That was a really good story. I liked that this one was dome from Chomusuke's pov herself. I liked how she had her catlike qualities but at the same time you acknowledge that human thoughts and what not are a new thing for her. Plenty of funny moments like the fact she tried to go to megumin's room on all fours, how she's able to haggle more fish from megumin, or even just calling aqua the blue thing. A very fun read. Dav b: I liked your story, it was a good way to finish out the collection. I enjoyed the fact that it was basically wolbach getting to interact with the party for a day. Plenty of funny moments like the "I love you master" thing, wolbach fearing zell, the girl's night ending with kazuma and megumin attacking aqua. Actually liked the ending even if we didn't get an answer it felt like it was fitting. There were a few parts where it felt like the scene transitions could be made a little easier to tell they've switched but overall I very much enjoyed the short. Lots of great stories from the lot of you and if there are any more coming I look forward to seeing what the next prompt may have in store. |
Guest chapter 1 . 6/1 Nice cool stories right here. If you don't mind, can you order the stories in reverse? As in winners last? Might help reading if the winning story isn't placed first. |
Arniecar145 chapter 1 . 5/15 Oh god these were great! We have wonderful writers in our community :) |
James Birdsong chapter 1 . 5/8 Obviously this is cool |
KonosubaFan64 chapter 1 . 5/7 Great job on all of these great stories. Hope to see more if you hold more contests! |
ffapathy chapter 1 . 5/6 Meyahviing: I liked how in character everyone was, felt like I was reading the official work. It was good to not get too far into how kazuma got sick as it made for a very funny ending (sometimes less is more). Striker: Your aqua was written really good. You did a good job of using her bit where she seems haughty and knowledgeable about something and talks down on kazuma only for him to leave her in tears in the end. Megumin turning things up to 11 by paralyzing him with the potion was quite funny. I didn't catch it at first and I'm not sure if it was intentional but the bit where kazuma says he had to apologize for his lack of taste made for a pretty good double entendre (losing his actual taste and unintentionally insulting darkness' cooking). Mr plush: Good build up with yours. You briefly mention that he has vivid nightmares and I picked up that it was succubi before they actually mention them being the cause. Supernatural floozies was an excellent line and I didn't know what damegami meant but looked it up and now I've learned something new. Don't know why but kazuma referring to darkness' masochism as a sickness rather than perversion was quite funny. Dav B: Pretty good overall. At first there were parts that I felt jumped around a bit like with aqua leaving but suddenly appearing again so quickly. But after stepping back and looking at it from the sense of it being more of a slapstick sort of humor I felt I could appreciate it more. Herozombie1: Not bad at all. While there wasn't some build up for a punchline or outlandish antics it was simple, well written slice of life. BetweenIandGirl: I get the sense that English isn't the first language of the author. That being said, in my head I was hearing the characters as if they had the stereotypical Russian accent and don't speak fluent english and it made the story immensely more amusing. It had a unique charm because of this. Humbert: Pretty funny. You mention kazuma attacking the funghouls (good name) with chomusuke in hand, I'm assuming you meant chunchunmaru. You did a good job of using the bit where kazuma reveals his selfish intentions by sticking his foot in his mouth and it backfiring on him. I also rather liked the darkness stuff at the end, playing off her self conscious aspects. Aquaisuseless: It was alright. I liked the premise of the memory loss thing. There were some parts that if proofread could have helped (spelling, at one point you describe megumin as the red "haired" girl). The ending I felt could have given a little bit more as things seemed to end too abruptly without specifying how kazuma ended up in this situation. That being said you write the humor decently snd I was amused all the same. Uranophane: Yours had a pinch of kazumin so yay for that. The structure of the short was good, show us his present problem, why he has it, how it was resolved. I don't want to call the story something as dismissive as "standard" but it very much captured the sort of humor and tone of the source material whilst seeming like something that would take place in its universe and made for an enjoyable ending to the collection. Good stories from all of ya and here's looking forward to seeing what else could be in store. |