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This has been a good continuation of the Mr. Black story from Terminal Justice. I look forward to the next chapter in this story. I find the premise of placing him in the Star Wars Prequel universe a great choice and look forward to the havoc he will undoubtedly either intentionally or unintentionally wreak on Palpatine’s plans. I hope you continue with this idea.

Very interesting concept. Horrible grammar and a lack of updates mean I can’t recommend it though.

Well I'm glad the whole bandwagon hasn't come along. Mr. Black gets into so many misunderstandings because there's no one there to straighten them out from the get go. By the time anyone who knows the truth comes along and can realize what is happening, it's snowballed into fact in peoples minds. They have no doubts and would be hard to convince otherwise. Kara would be smart enough to notice and would probably find it amusing but I think she would quickly try to correct people. She can be mischievous but she's still Superman's niece, the big boy scout himself. He would disapprove of continuing the misunderstanding and he would have rubbed off on her. So with Kara around too soon, I don't think Joe could be mistaken for something he's not for long. Kara's too smart, sane and responsible, unlike anyone from the magical world. They wouldn't even notice what was happening and would only unintentionally make people misunderstand more. The Buffy group both do and don't notice when there's been a misunderstanding. Xander notices when it's about Mr. Black but none of them notice when it concerns themselves.

These type of stories would be challenging to write which is why I will never try one. Brave of you to do it. I'll admit I didn't enjoy Terminal Justice as much as Make a Wish. Part of it may have been too many characters regularly added. Make a Wish was mostly Harry on his own, wondering wherever he may and briefly meeting people and causing misunderstandings before separating. The most time he had was with Henchgirl and the Professor who are crazy in their own right and oblivious to what they cause. Terminal Justice had him spending more time with Kara and the Justice League members and focusing on DC storylines. It was more confined. It wasn't as care free and whimsical or absurd. There were misunderstandings but they weren't as fun to me. And I'll admit, I could have enjoyed it just as much, if not even maybe more, without the romance and adoptions.

You'll have your work cut out for you. Unlike Justice League or Buffy, Star Wars doesn't have supernatural entities/dieties aside from force ghosts. That limits who or what they could mistake Joe as unless they mistake him as the Force taking a human form. I don't know that they have an entity they could identify as Death or an angel or demon or god. Perphaps individual planets with their own customs and religions might. Even the Force can't do the things magic can.

Too many characters going along for my taste. If they're going to be sticking with Joe once they get there, that's just too many characters to keep track of what they're doing. Remember that we have to read this and you have to write it. We can't tell what those characters are doing at the time unless you tell us. That's Joe, Kara, Henchgirl, the Doctor, the Mechanic, the Architect, Galatea, Pamela, Moody, Shacklebolt, the aurors, and the veela. If they're not sticking with him, why not just send them afterwards in a minor conversation? So and so is coming later after we get more ships made or something. And are the aurors getting paid for this? Or are they taking vacation days? Also, they have been out of their atmosphere. The tower was in outer space and the Justice League has been to other planets. Unless you meant galaxy and even then I'm not entirely sure that would be correct. I have no idea what all planets they've been to or where they are in the universe. And doesn't someone need to stay back to make sure everyone else can return? What if something goes wrong? No one will be in their home universe to fix it like they normally are. At least, none of the people who normally fix it like Henchgirl or the Professor, the ones who start the mess in the first place with their inventions.

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First chapter had way too many crossover references followed by unknown circumstances for any reader to get a hold of the story. Impossible to read as is.

like it so far. just hope you don't fall into plot holes like original author did in that after Harry/Black's first battle in "make a wish" the investigator removed the tracking charms on Harry but yet voldie kept sending DE's after him by using tracking charm. that was one plot hole that really needs to be fixed.

Hedwig is the embodiment of the Light side and Nuni is the embodiment of the Dark side.

Great chapter! Love the start!

Great story so far. Love Mr. Black. Will be interesting to see where you go from here.

Personally never liked the current crop of the Jedi, I mean they go out and kidnapped babies and children and use memory modifications on the parents, sort of same thing that wizards used on non-magicals. Morally wrong...

Jedi is like Dumbledore's Greater Good Lightside where everything that is dark evil and should be eradicated. Jedi considers love to be dark and evil.

All Yoda has to do is declare Mr. Black to be dark and wham the entire order will try to destroy him...

Great Start, the build up is very good this chapter. Hope this is a sign of future things to come. Mr Black is at his best when he acts unobstrusively and leaves others boggling at the sheer number of coincidences which you seem to have captured quite well. I would also love to see Mace Windu's jaw drop when he sees Mr Black as a living breathing shatter point or something even more epic.