As a judge for this contest, I'd like to say this: How dare you come on this person's story and say this? It was an anon contest fairly voted on by the judges and readers. We did not know who wrote this- only the secret keeper did.

This some Kanye West bullshit. Have a seat, ma'am, and shut your mouth.

Entrapment deserved the first place. Do you know the judges? How can this get the first place?!

this is so good

That was great. I hope it’s expanded. Thanks for writing.

Love the music references throughout the story. Glad Charlie got his comeuppance what a POS.
Sweet story. More please.

Best of luck in the contest

:) loved this. I hope there will be more

Oh I loved this version of Edward and Bella! I think this really stood out against the other entries I've read so far. I really enjoyed it! The writing was fantastic, and I hope you decide to continue it after the contest. I would love to see how things work out for it these two. :) Thank you for participating in the contest!

Sooo good!

Nice!

Man that Charlie is a bastard! He got his, I’m happy that Bella got away from him.

Loved this! Thanks for entering!

Sounds like you might have more planned for this story. Hope that true because I’d like to read more. Thanks for sharing this with the rest of us and best of luck in the contest.

Maybe it’s my age but I still enjoy stories where the young woman is “rescued“… so long as she’s strong in her own right, which Bella is. I’m glad she got to punch her dad in the face. I’m also glad that they didn’t kill him because that felt like a line that shouldn’t be crossed but this was a lot of fun!

This is so good, I really hope you continue it.

Thanks for sharing and good luck!