This is beautiful...

Very good. Might want to run spell check every once in a while. If you can , have a chapter of Umbridge facing the charges and a trial.

Absolutely love this story! Can't wait to see how things progress with Harry and Daphne.
Also nice to see Ron not super prejudice against all slytherins and actually falling in love with one!
Can't wait for your next update! Keep up the great work!

Despite Tracey's reluctance to accept help, I'd very much like to see Harry buy her a broom for Christmas given his omnipotent good nature. I think it would make perfect sense based on Harry's character and think it would be a good opportunity to further Harry's friendship with Tracey and potentially Daphne.

Despite Tracey's reluctance to accept help, I'd very much like to see Harry buy her a broom for Christmas given his omnipotent good nature.

This isn't bad. I do have some issues with the story, which I will write about later, but I've had a positive experience overall.

Let's start with positives. The story is written quite competently, author has a good grasp on grammar. Only mistakes I noticed are occational missing words, such as this sentence from the end of chapter 16:

"That Tracey might not be the only with a Gryffindor in her sights,"

I think there is a noun missing. How weird is that? This isn't the only instance of this sort of error, but I didn't take notes while reading. I have to admit, though, these mistakes are unusual and refreshing. It's a nice change of pace from the usual "your" instead of "you're", or some such.

So, other positives. While there is no romance as such yet, interactions between Daphne and Harry are interesting enough as to keep me invested in characters. Positive portrayal of Ron is quite original twist on the usual bashing trope, so I can applaud that.

On the negative side, there is mainly lack of originality. This can work in certain circumstances where the story has other significant redeeming qualities, such as characters being altered in interesting ways, strong characterization fuelling amazing romance scenes, and so on. Let's be honest here, this story only really has one character. Daphne. An entire story is pretty much revolving around her and others either don't get much screen time (Ron), their character isn't developed in an interesting way (Harry), or there is little character to speak of (Tracey).

I think this might be more subjective issue coming from my end than any fault of author's, but I just dislike het stories with female point of view. I also dislike pov switching too often. Strangely enough, right now, I don't remember reading a single story or book written this way that I would enjoy (or even finish reading), so this is probably just me.

In the end, I guess didn't found the story very engaging. At the beginning, I was interested in the premise and Daphne figuring out how to fit in with rest of the DA. Now, I am slowly losing my interest. I intend to read next chapters should they appear just to see how romance will be handled and to see any future twists. Followed.

Love this story-especially the way you write Daphne-not a perfect pureblood princess, but a snarky sassy slytherin.! But please, don't make a bitch out of Hermione. She and Ron definitely don't work together, but as you put it, it will be a whole lot of useless drama, and how Hermione had her chance, and, will she get over it already? I think it will be utterly unfair to her, and I KNOW you can do something better with her. Good luck with writing!

I like it so far. Good to see a normal Ron for a change.
Just one thing. The Greengrass motto. I don't know where you got the latin, but it's wrong, and most likely it'll be repeated more times through the story. "Know" can be either of these: nosce, gnosce, or sci. I think the first is the best option. "thyself" is teipsum. So the motto should be: nosce teipsum et omnes sequentur.
Also, omnes is everyone. If you want it to mean "all things will follow" then it should be changed to "omnia sequitur".
Keep it up! It looks like a good story!

It's nice to see Daphne getting along with her sister better. :)
And loved the scenes with Tracey. I had already hoped that Daphne would get to play with Tracey on something muggle (though at first I had thought that it was a computer, not a PS :P ). Both the Jurassic Park and PS must be rather recent I think? ;)

Loved the story man please keep it up update soon please.

Most of the times I see a Haphne fic, either Harry has to change from canon to be able to even get along with Daphne, or Daphne ends up pining away from afar for Harry for years just waiting for the perfect opportunity to show him how nice and warm and loving she is behind the mask. You’ve managed to avoid both of these perfectly. This is genuinely the best fic of this pairing that I’ve seen in a while. I do wonder what you plan on doing with Hermione, Tracy, and Ron. Kudos to you, can’t wait for more.

So so happy this story was updated 2 days ago! I can't wait until the next chapter!

The... Last chapter? No... It can't be!

This is great. I love every moment of it (except fanfiction censoring your usage of OWLS but what can you do?)

Seriously, thank you so much for writing this. I cant wait to see what these hopeless teenagers get eachother for Christmas.

I'm also still angry about Tracy's broom, but considering I just binged this in one sitting I don't think that's strange. Right!?

"But when he mattered, when he'd known about the dragons it had been Ron that had warned him."

Wtf? Have you even read the books? Ron not telling Harry about his brother being there and the dragons is one of the prime reasons so many people despise Ron as an insecure loser and a despicable friend. His focus on "glory" and the tournament did not put him in a very good light. Not saying you need to bash Ron but eliminating his real flaws like you do is basically the same as people who bash him.

I hate to nitpick, but the gaming was off. The year should be 1995, Halo wouldn't be released for another six years. Given that Harry Potter is set in the UK, Tracey would most likely have a Sega Mega Drive (Genesis in the US); the Super Nintendo wasn't as successful in the PAL regions but she could have had one. Playstation would have come out in the UK a couple months earlier and had no good games. Best choices for Mega Drive would be Streets of Rage 2, ToeJam and Earl, Zombies Ate My Neighbors, Street Fighter 2, or Sonic 2, 3, or Sonic and Knuckles. If you're more comfortable with the SNES library, you probably already know which games you want to use.