Man, it's been a while since I've read a good old-fashioned songfic! This was really good, I'm glad I found this gem!

It's short but gets to the point slow enough for the story to make sense. I love it.

I really love this story!
It made me crazy that this needed so much time.(the Kiss)
I really like that shipping and your writingstyle
Sincerely
Yesse

I like the story

Since it has the copied lyrics of Avril Lavigne's "Girlfriend", it breaks the following part of the Content Guidelines:

Actions not allowed:
3. Copying from a previously published work (including musical lyrics) not in the public domain.

Please remove all of the copied lyrics from your story before someone can use them as evidence in their abuse reports.

And in case you're wondering when and why that rule is made, here is the background information. Back on April 27, 2005, the admins put this message on the front page regarding songfics:

In addition, [this site] would like to address a growing problem. For whatever reason, some writers feel it's okay to copy-n-paste musical lyrics they have not written into their fiction. If you did not write it, do not post it. This has always been our policy. Please remove these entries immediately to avoid account closure.

Keep in mind that "public domain" means something that has expired intellectual properties, like Shakespearean works. And disclaimers don't cut it for song lyrics. Not even changing a few words from the original song will be enough.

Good job

This is good and I like perlia, I'm willing to beta-read I work best with plots with my grammar okay. PM me if you're interested.

hey, I loved this story! I don't know why but I've always been a big fan of perlia, and it's really rare to find something like this so thanks so much. hope to see more of your works in the future!