This was good.

This put some warmth in my cold and dead heart...

Thanks for recommending my fanfic!

You managed to make both Lucifina and Ilias sympathetic, despite the latter killing the former in a slow and painful way. That's an impressive job with less than 4000 words.

There's some grammar and structural issues, but not enough to make the story unreadable. You might want to get a beta, though.

I'll be sure to check out your next MGQ fanfic.