I massively enjoyed this first chapter. I enjoyed your framing and writing of the space naval battles and their lack of understanding of Harry as well as staying in Anakin's point of view as the pursuer/ hunter. The way you write the naval battles in a way that makes it easy to visualize. The way Anakin blames himself for the harm Ahsoka undergoes seems so true for the character and I cannot wait to see how this motivates him in the future. I am excited for future interactions between Anakin and Harry directly or indirectly. I'm curious as to where this will go and I cannot wait to read more.

please update

Very good. please make more chapters

Good start, can’t wait to see how this story develops.

Not bad, but this Harry Potter is seriously OC. It might be that I needed to read the previous version but I'll have to wait and see if this gets better before judging.

I'm just glad this is continuing. :)

Can't wait to read the next chapter.

This is shaping up to be a very good story

Interesting start. The mix of ships was well done as far as introducing a starter pirate fleet. The gravity well ship that only worked for. Short time is nice too as it could easily have been abused to give a god-mode style fleet to the pirates. So it's good that you used it for shock value then destroyed it. And it looks like you are pulling a more Harry Potter style mission of impersonating others next chapter with the Venator. So looking good so far.

Poor Ahsoka, I hope she gets better.

The original was better, at least in the first iteration Harry came off as competent and intelligent, now he just comes off as Sirius Black in space aka goofy and not to be taken seriously regardless of what he does. Admittedly this is only the first chapter for this rewrite but the tone Harrys interactions gives off is not promising. First version ship names were better too, Scion of Hogwarts...really?!

Great story. Perhaps in the next chapter you could give more info about Harry's past.

I think it's a good opener. We connected with the Starwars characters this chapter. Now the next chapter should connect us to the Harry in this starwars universe and his new support characters better. Some extra magic that stumps Anakin is nice. :D

Let's see how this goes

Nice very nice. I like this a bit better than the older version. One mistake I noticed was in the introduction it mentions "Following his victory of Jedi General" I think you mean "his victory over Jedi General".

Something I wasn't sure on was the part were Anakin was ignoring the bodies of uniformed civilians did he mean merchant ship crews?

I liked the battle at the end. Capturing an enemies capital ship is no small accomplishment. I'm not sure I like him using it as a trojan horse but I'm not sure what else he could use for. I hope we learn more about Harry. Like what are his goals? He's made a lot of money so far will he retire or continue fighting in the war.

Great chapter, looking forward to more! I know it was only the first chapter but I wish there was more Harry screen time.