Oh man, the way that the dream, or memory, played out was really great! I could picture it while reading it.

So maybe the Navis and Viruses could get under the platforms. XD

It's nice to see Tokemi in the chapter.

Keep up the good work, Lukia! :D

Write on!

I had fun reading it, Lukia.

The way that you were able to have Luiza and Rina to go back and forth in their conversation seemed so natural.

And what a cliffhanger! XD

I really love how you cameoed the other Navis while putting hints in plain sights!

The fact that Luiza said something that hurt Rina felt natural, I love it!

The wait was worth it!

I admit I was skeptical at first, I'm not a fan of OC-based stories but this one hooked me up. This shift in the otherwise lighthearted mood of the games have piqued my interest. I'm digging the approach to an original story without dehumanizing or twisting the canons to accommodate an oc. Kudos for that

*Reads the chapter* Oh man, a chapter with my OCs! I enjoyed every moment reading it, Lukia!

I even laughed at Luiza's mention of that creature getting after him.

I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Write on! :D

Oh wow, my Character now! :D

Thank you for making her amazing in your own words, Lukia! :D

I can't wait to see the next chapter! :)

*Noticed how I didn't review this one*

Oh man, I can't even imagine how furious/confused Luiza must be feeling when realizing that it was Vamos's Company.

I feel bad for Variable's Operator. XD

*Finishes it completely* Aw nu! That was so adorable!

I really love how you added the Aftermath of the battle with the other guy than just 'Ah yeah, nothing happened because yeah.'.

Great chapter, Lukia! :D

I read the fight until it went to Alpha saying 'This is BS!' and that was when... I knew that I had to comment and Love this chapter.

...Now to read the rest of the story.

Also, I saw what you did. ;3

Another chapter?! Whoa! AMAZING!

I enjoyed reading Taku's lines with a slight abridge. X3
And altered some in my mind.

I can't wait for the next chapter. :D

Oh wow, another post already?! You're on fire! :o :D

I honestly can't wait to see what comes next for the character, Luiza!

The fact that Luiza stopped Donovan with a jab to his nose could be her own thing! If she doesn't like how the conversation goes, then jab them in the nose! XD

Be sure to continue to write on, Lukia! :D