I have a few ideas that you can use for chapters in your fan fiction. The major thing a like about this story is how your OC interacts with the characters and describe these funny and heartwarming moments they have to strengthen their bonds as friends/family.

1. I would like to see more chapters focused on Peter spending time with other characters besides Ian and Barley. Like a moment where Peter is spending time with only Mrs. Lightfoot and how she views Peter more as a third son. Also some moments where Peter is solely spending time with Corey or Bronco. Corey could become like a cool aunt to Peter, and I think it would be interesting if we explore more on Peter’s relationship with his father with Bronco. Seeing how he struggled bonding with Ian and Barely in the movie, It would probably be funny an interesting to see that between Peter and Bronco.

2. Maybe have some moments where Peter is solely bonding with the other classmates in his literature class besides the mermaid boy and the guitar playing elf. Maybe have a moment where the Gremlin is helping him with his homework or Peter gets into a little mischief with his fairy classmate and how these moments gradually develop these characters into more of Peter’s friends. Maybe have him bond more with Ian’s friends from the movie.

3. Definitely have some chapters about Peter and Vinala’s relationship. Have him go to the Lightfoot’s for some advice on his new feelings for the cyclops girl. Have Peter go through the struggle of asking her on a date. Go through the process of the Lightfoots helping him prepare for the date. Finally, have the date and whether it becomes a success or disaster which will strengthen their love.

4. Don’t be afraid to add new mythical species into the world. It’s a fan fiction after all. I myself was a little disappointed with some of the lack of creativity with a fantasy world that relies on modern technology. I know Minotaurs were referenced in the movie, maybe throw in a Minotaur. I always had this funny idea if some characters in the world even kept Cerberus dogs as pets. Maybe have Gorgons, Sphinx, Gnolls, Orcs, the possibilities are endless! Especially since the movie had quite a few D&D references. Think about it.

And that’s what I have to offer. I hope this helps with the fan fiction and I apologize if it’s too much to take in. Can’t wait to see what you come up with.

I’m so sorry for your loss. I wish I could give you a big hug right now. I never knew any of my grandparents, but I know it was rough on my sisters when our grandmother passed away.

Sadly I never got to watch the movie since the Bug hit so reading this fic is pretty damn awesome Hopefully at some point I'll be able to but in the meantime keep up the awesome, bro~

Too much? This chapter is just long enough, don't worry. By the way, is there any fan art for this?

Awesome story!

I feel sorry for Peter. I really hope that he and the Lightfoots find a way to bring him to the right time. Can't wait to read the next chapter! Keep up the good work!

Loving the story so far! Although, Barley has my heart, I sense some angst within Peter's family situation and can't wait to read more!

I really like this story so far. Keep up the good work and please update soon.

I'm loving this story so far! Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the good work!

Nice going with naming the person Peter. But this is really good!

Great start! However,I was wondering when you are going to continue your SWAT Kats fic. Looking forward to the next chapter of it. But this one looks good too. Keep safe yourself!

This is a good chapter with a bit of panic.