This is really interesting.

Lady good chap. Really enjoyed it.
Waiting for next chap

This is really good. Please keep it going

Interesting stuff looking forward to more

i love your fic

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I still just don’t understand why he’s not doing anything to improve his situation. Or at least preparing for things to come. You’re basically just building the same Peter “Puny” Parker and that kind of story is boring and more often than not filled with stupid teenage angst and drama. You would think having a someone with more life experience and Peters intellect would go wild with stuff but instead we get a scared kid with foolish ideals without the actual things that made Spider-Man Spider-Man.

Man, there is being kind and sound in reasoning and there's being kind but real naive. You gave future knowledge to Emma Frost I mean just the thought of giving out future knowledge is completely stupid, naive and just reckless in a universe like Marvel, and the fact that you're doing all of this AS Peter Parker(child) without any powers! Man! This will absolutely lead your family and the MC in danger IF that doesn't happen well your story is dog shit cause it pretty much has one of the most cancerous plot armor lol, which is you not being a good fanfic author. Good luck, I just liked the fact that you were all, man all these SI are assholes well let's be a kind nice guy, reveal everything to everyone cause they are real people! LMFAO fucking hillarious, atleast the other SI stories are entertaining to read and not painful. Le sigh

Interesting story but him following the same path as the OG Peter Parker would have is a bit boring. Some butterflies where he has different friends would be more interesting. A lot of SI's just copy what he would have already done. Like be friends with MJ and Gwen Stacy and all that canon stuff.

You know, this fanfic reminds me of another story called "Absolute power sucks absolutely", in both of them we have people who self inserted themselves in situations where it is really hard to fuck it , one of them has literally basically absoute power in a area aroound him, and the other is young genius with a lot of potential, who could even become spider-man. What was expected, is that "Peter" would use his newfound intellect to to do something productive, and live the life of his dreams, (being Peter Parker would be awesome, even without the spider powers, his intellect alone is a super power) But instead they end up like whiny little babies with a emo attitude. Or a lack of atittude thereof, both of them are spineless little bitches. Because, in this fic, the guy is a supposedly a genius, and can't think of any racional way of utilizing it? Maybe getting a scholarship or a early Phd or something? Maybe reverse engineer super technology and make a cool super suit or something? Make something to improve his survivability, and/or get money? Noooo,He is going to pretend hes a normal boy, and then, after living the lie for too long, he then break the rule number one of Self Insert fanfics, and tell people about it, without any necessity whatsoever. And then as a very previsible consequence people will think you are crazy, because extraordinary claims need extraordinary proof, and you have nothing. And because you are a minor you will be forced to get therapy. And then if that was not bad enough, this so called "genius" goes and provoke a morally loose telepath to read his fucking mind. Is he a genius or mentally retarded? Serisously, Operational Security exists for a reason. You dont give potential enemies information that can harm you, specially if they are sociopaths in the making like Emma Frost. Seriosuly dude, the first thing you "Self-Insert" should have done after you discovered that telepaths exist is to find a way to block their telepathy. Mind control is a thing in the universe he is in. Find or make some protection! After all, he is a "genius". Ha. Genius my ass. Self-destructive indeed. Waste of my time reading this shit.

This is actually pretty cool and realistic imma follow so please continue this

Alright cool, just completed a binge read, and the fic is looking really good, far better than The Spider, or The Savvy Spider-man, espescially when it comes to your prose.

Here's my advice, this chapter is rather boring, and personally feels, to me out of place, I think that when dealing with the high school components of Spider-man, you need to re-evalutae structure of how you write scenes, and to give these characters far more, prevalence and importance, give them deeper descriptions or more impactful entrances, like MJ.

Despite that, your writing is good, though I feel you need to give more emphasis on locations, and the setting when you, write its diffucult to imagine and immerse a reader when they don't know where they are.

That's the most obvious stuff I found that I didn't like besides that your grammar is spot on, your characters particularly peter feel real and distinct, also your way of introducing other characters like Emma frost feels organic, especially in a comic-book world.

I can say with full certainty, from what little you have written, that your on your way to claiming the top spot for Spider-man SI's, though, given most peoples preferences for Spider-man rather than peter, i feel these opening segments and the spaces in-between will pose the most challenge for you in hooking in readers, as a quirky high school super-genius isn't as interesting or engaging to follow as Spider-man. Though I do enjoy, Peters interactions with the people around him, and would love to see how you explore these various characters, after all another theme most people miss in Spider-man fics, is that everybody is way deeper than just what they look like on the surface, a great example being Flash, what with being abused by his father, gravitating towards football to make his father proud yet failing, and just plainly being a kid in a bad situation who is lashing out at people, like peter.

Alright this review might be jumping the gun, considering I haven't even read the first chapter yet, but despite that I did read your bio and the little blurb you wrote.

I consider myself something of a, expert when it comes to Spider-man SI's, not an expert of writing them, or even writing in general, but on stories like this, I've browsed and read through the worst and best of Spider-man SI's.

And I've come to a conclusion, even the best Spider-man SI fic, is bottom tier in overall fanfic writing quality, which is saddening, but all too true, because most authors use spider-man given his relatable nature, as a wish fulfillment device and betray the morals and core of the character in truly heinous ways.

But you've recognized that, and honestly given the fact that you're making an active effort to avoid that and create a hero, rather than give your si the name Spider-man and assume that makes them a hero, you're fic will be worth reading irreverent of writing quality, because you're aiming for the ultimate goal of writing a Spider-man fic, where others always try to write an SI fic.

So thank you, and excuse the minor word wall, i'll be watching this fic really closely, and I hope, that if this fic is written with a decent quality, that the heart you're trying to present shines through, and that alone will make this the best Spider-man SI fic, in my humble opinion.

I think you have a great si Peter Parker on your hands . As long as you don't drop it Midway you are fine. The Sam raimi trilogy is a good example to use for alternate Spider-Man with the mcu and stick to the core of the story keep romance between SI Peter/MJ Watson everything will come easily and adding your own twists to the storyline so far good. just wait too many chapter's to give him his spider powers . Keep writing. Cheers !

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