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outcome 5 chapter 13 . 7/14 Continue soon please |
Bella-swan11 chapter 13 . 7/14 Aemon is happy that Jaeron has become a boy who wants to do the right thing, he will be a good king and the pride of the Targaryen house. Aemon you must prepare Jaeron to assume the role of king, you need to help him choose allies and who will be his future wife. Alliser you should advise Jaeron to learn to use two swords like being Arthur Dayne, this way he can use his two swords. |
perseus peverell chapter 13 . 7/14 A very nice story with good grammar and nice pacing. Keep up the good work. |
Bella-swan11 chapter 12 . 7/2 What a great mistake it was to crown Robert as king, the people suffer because you helped kill Prince Rhaegar; stop making excuses write letters to the nobles of the North to prepare the armies. Stop making excuses saying that you don't want to reveal yourself because you would make Sansa unhappy, she has shown you that she would sell her family in order to be queen; because that's when he lied to protect his precious Joffrey. You should be ashamed that your daughter has covered herself with this, she acts like a father, she breaks her dreams as a child, it is time for me to think as a woman; because the lords of the North will not respect her if she betrays her family for a crown. Now talk to being Barristan, it is time for him to find out about Jon's true origin; since the dragons are going to grow and the rumors of their existence will be known in the kingdoms and in the free cities. The reaction of Daenerys and Viserys to the knowledge that in Westeros there are living dragons and that the legitimate son of their brother Rhaegar is alive, as the dragon says has three heads. |
Manaliac chapter 12 . 7/1 Great chapter! hopefully they will find Benjen soon. |
naruto chapter 11 . 6/19 great chapter keep it up |
Shugi Merry chapter 11 . 6/19 Great fic! Though, err... excuse me but, where is Ghost in all of this? |
Bella-swan11 chapter 11 . 6/15 Jaeron learning to be king takes time, now take advantage of the time you have left to learn how to be a king; Listen to your Uncle Aemon's advice on what kind of education you should have. You must ensure your allies it is time to plan, especially do not forget history do not repeat the mistakes of your family; your dragons are going to start growing quickly you must be prepared for it. |
A Random Earthian chapter 11 . 6/15 It is a really good story, I can't wait to see more (Jon's training for exemple, or the Starks' travel)! |
Reikson chapter 11 . 6/13 About the Valyrian sentences... here my amateurish grammatical corrections. PLEASE take it with ALL the salt. Sentence #1: Vumbiarziapot jaelāt sagon gīmin daor, yn jemī lanto daorys gīmissi eman. Sytīmēre mībo jedar kesos. (Untangling the first sentence of this bit was a real headache. By comparison, the second one was much easier.) Sentence #2: I believe that the difference between "buzdari" and "dohaeriros" is deliberate. Considering how Kinvara was introduced, the Valyrians might have seen little difference between servant and slave in Valyrian society. The fact that the Ghiscari word for slave, "buzdari", made its way into the Valyrian vocabulary seems to indicate a desire to illustrate a specific societal difference between Valyrian slaves and foreign slaves... Sentence #3: Daor, zaldrīzoti sētri sagon rāeltro iemnȳ iksā daor. (I just about made this whole damn sentence up, and I have no idea whether or not it's grammatically correct!) |
outcome 5 chapter 11 . 6/13 Great chapter continue soon please |
GodoftheSeas21 chapter 11 . 6/13 Absolutely loving the story. Only thing I ask is could you put the Valarian translations in parentheses after the actual phrases please |
Softballsl Girl chapter 11 . 6/13 You didn’t mention Ghost at all op |
Bella-swan11 chapter 10 . 6/8 Jon, on this trip you can take advantage of making visits to all the nobles who were loyal to your father Rhaegar, it is certain that your great-uncle Aemon will know who are still loyal to your father even after death; it is time that you meet them and that they learn the truth and the existence of dragons. Jon you should consider meeting Lord Velaryon, Lord Celtigar and Lord Tarly you need to start with your conquest plans who better than these nobles who have shown loyalty to the Targaryen house; It is also pleasing that Lord Talry helps you knowing that he defeated Robert Baratheon. Time to start whispering that all kingdoms listen to songs about: the truth of the laughing knight, about the love between your parents and their marriage, the truth of Robert's rebellion, the actions of Tywin Lannister who plundered King's Landing and that he had Elia and your brothers murdered. Jaeron remember you are a dragon, act as such, you need an army and behind the wall there are 100,000 people who can become your army if you act with intelligence; the night watch might object to letting free people in but on the wall there are many loyal to the Targaryen who will support you in the decisions you make. It would be considered that when you regain your throne, the liberates from the wall to these loyalists of the Targaryen house their only crime was to be loyal to your father. |
naruto chapter 10 . 6/5 good chapter keep it up |