great chapter I wonder what Kakashi has planned to break Sasuke out of his arrogant attitude

I would also state, that the dialog for Naruto doesn't sound like him. I mean the argument last Chap with Kyuu was pretty spot on but the introspective sounds more like your own voicing as it sounds like your descriptions. The voice of the characters however should sound similar to their cannon twins at this point as there hasn't been much convergence from the original story yet... however as more chapters go on it would make sense to up Naruto's verbage as he IS studying voraciously.

However I will say you probably speak very technically in real life and just accodentally make mistakes in typing more so than actually not knowing what to write.

my vote is noooo to Shizune... shes so important as a sister figure in his life nooo don't do this lol

honestly the grammar and spelling is off a bit but I'm enjoying it thus far regardless. You struggle with tense. Past, present,future tense and this makes the sentences feel... off. but like I said its not the worst thing.

great chapter I look forward to the next one

Iruka ex Anbu very interesting

Ok, I could not make it past the first chapter. You are a technically skilled writer, but your writing has stripped the Naruto character of his personality. Your writing is too clinical, too mechanical. othere than that, you have some good potential, so does your story.

Loving the story so far, but naruto not telling the homage that there’s a spy, an invasion and that danzo is working with a traitor is a bit ridiculous to me. I hope everything works out though, very excited to see where this goes

You don't have to fear about him acting like a Samurai.

Naruto learning the secret of Shadow Clone in the first chapter was something I did to improve his training.

Naruto saying that he wants everything through hardwork just defeats the purpose of that and when he has the knowledge of his village getting invaded in future, I don't think he would like to waste time to learn everything through hard work.

Thanks for the review by the way and hope you provide your suggestions in future chapters.

i like it ! ,

but i hope naruto is using his cheat and dont act like a fucking samurai .. i mean like jiraya do every fanfic saying that naruto cant use shadowclones to help train cause he belives in hard work blabla... he should totaly use the shit out of his shadowclones he should atleast have 2 or 3 of them in the libary everyday xD

interesting training, and glad to see naruto finally talk back to sakura abuse.

Hey, nice chapter, excited for the next one. My only comment is that the small intro section at the top of each chapter doesn't really add anything to the story, and just seems like skippable fluff

Firstly, thanks for your reviews Glitner and Samus. I know this chapter had felt like it was mainly based on Flashbacks but I think for Naruto to come to a decision it was necessary.

Even so I will keep in my mind for reducing the possibilities of flashbacks as much as possible until and unless it was required.

May hope that you will continue to read the future chapters.

this is nice and all but way to many flashbacks i skipped almost everything...

i mean the fb with haku how many fucking times have we all read about that bit ...

kishimoto you sneaky bastard. No not really but surely felt like I was ready the Manga again with the unnecessary amount of flashback and 0 movement forward. Look before anyone says i am just flaming i need to say it. I like the premise and the idea i really do and I want YOU to CONTINUE IT but by the love of Zeus overly inflated ego tries to keep flashbacks to a minimum