its amazing

please more

Will you continue this?

This is amazing! I'm dying for it to be updated

Okay so first off, I want to apologize for my previous review. It was rude and I shouldn’t have said that.

Moving on, cool chapter. Hope you can write more.

Fantastic

Oooh, this is good :) keep up awesomeness

I love it keep doing wat you are doing!

please ignore chapter 3 and my horrible spelling and the songs are not mine along with undertale and harry potter

Sorry but it's a no from me

You really stressed eye color and hair color, which is fine but you could try it in more natural ways. And the amount, of doing, this, was kind of sucking away my, concentration. I don't mean to be cynical or anything. An example of my first thing us that you kept putting "red-haired brother". Why not just my brother? Do they have multiple brothers? That and some general improvements in english

To be honest, the resumé ( or whatever it’s called) wasn’t very good. But the story itself, even if it is just one chapter at the moment, is great!